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preparing cherry jam from picking cherries to cooking and packaging

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This text is about preparing cherry jam from picking cherries to cooking and packaging we have nine stages in the process At the begining we have to get the cherries from the tree and transporting whit a special car and washing the cheries and removing the stems and taking the stons and cooking the jam First of all a sheet is spread on the ground and the tree is shaken to get the cherries. Then the cherries are collected and are taken to the processing plant. Next the leaves and stems are removed and the cherries are washed then the stone is taken out of middel of the cherias and Pour them into a large bowl and add sugar and lemon To cook well and become a jam. After all of them the qualiti of jam is checked and if the quality is good it is ready to go to jars Finally a label is stuck on the jars so they are ready to sale I think it is important to do the sterile preparation steps anf of course the taste of jam is very imortant too And if both of these things are observed, it will definitely be a popular jam
This text is about preparing cherry jam from picking
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cherries
to cooking and packaging we have nine stages in the process

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begining
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get
the
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cherries
from the tree and transporting whit a special car and washing the
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cheries
and removing the stems and taking the
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stons
and cooking the jam

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First of all
a sheet
is spread
on the ground and the tree
is shaken
to
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get
the
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cherries
. Then the
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cherries
are collected
and
are taken
to the processing plant.
Next
the
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leaves
and stems
are removed
and the
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cherries
are washed
then the stone
is taken
out of
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middel
of the
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cherias
and Pour them into a large bowl and
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add
sugar and lemon To cook well and become a jam.

After all
of them the
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qualiti
of jam is
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checked
and if the quality is
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good
it is ready to go to jars

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Finally
a label
is stuck
on the jars
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so
they are ready to sale

I
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think
it is
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important
to do the sterile preparation steps
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anf
of course
the taste of jam is
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very
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imortant
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And if both of these things
are observed
, it will definitely be a popular jam
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IELTS essay preparing cherry jam from picking cherries to cooking and packaging

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
201 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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