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popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. with this opinion? k2ee
The World Cup football match and the Olympics are held worldwide with great national support and expectations. As a fan of those competitions, I agree with the idea that sporting events can be necessary for international relations and national unity. In this essay, I will think about the effects of these popular sporting events. First of all, the World Cup, Olympics and other international games work for easing tensions among different nations. For example, South and North Korea have football games regularly which give two nations a chance to understand each other deeply. In the mid 1990s, a hundreds of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the footballers and they were very excited during the sporting events. Even if it sounds ridiculous, many South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the match. We all realized that they were very normal sports fans even though they were occasionally very secretive. Through the sports, two divided nations could reduce their political and ideological tensions and could feel the patriotic unity. On the other hand, some sports matches can make international relations worse. For instance, football or baseball games between Korea and Japan are always big matches in two countries where full of tensions overflow. Sometimes, after the matches, the two rivals blame each other and their patriotic emotions explode in an aggressive way. Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing games affect the players directly. In conclusion, I think that international sporting occasions can be one of the good ways to ease tensions or to release patriotism safely. However, I believe that games can not be the fundamental ways for the sound patriotism or peaceful international relations.
The World Cup football
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and the Olympics
are held
worldwide with great national support and expectations. As a fan of those competitions, I
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can be necessary for
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relations and national unity. In this essay, I will
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about the effects of these popular sporting
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international
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games
work for easing
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tensions
among
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different
nations.
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, South and North Korea have football
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games
regularly
which give two nations a chance to understand each
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other
deeply
. In the mid 1990s,
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a hundreds
of North Korean supporters came to South Korea with the
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footballers and
they were
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excited during the sporting
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. Even if it sounds ridiculous,
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South Koreans were quite surprised at that moment when North Koreans shouted and cried during the
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match
. We all realized that they were
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normal sports fans
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occasionally
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secretive. Through the sports, two divided nations could
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reduce
their political and ideological
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tensions
and could feel the patriotic unity.

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sports
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matches
can
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relations worse.
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, football or baseball
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between Korea and Japan are always
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big
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matches
in two countries where full of
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overflow.
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Sometimes
, after the
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matches
, the two rivals blame each
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other
and their patriotic emotions explode
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in an aggressive way
. Even much worse scenario is that the troubles caused by losing
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games
affect the players
directly
.

In conclusion
, I
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sporting occasions can be one of the
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or to release patriotism
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However
, I believe that
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games
can not be the fundamental ways for the sound patriotism or peaceful
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international
relations.
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IELTS essay popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. with this opinion?

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