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Poor students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to get access to the university education some people think University should make it easier for them to do study?

Poor students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to get access to the university education some people think University should make it easier for them to do study? 6xd3l
It is a debatable issue that low income family who belongs to poor family usually find it difficult to enrollment in the university for their higher education while others oppose that tertiary education should provide some amenities to the children so that they are able to do their study in easy way so I agree with this statement up to large extent and this essay will give assertion with agree side of contention before explicate my logical example and conclusion in upcoming paragraph. To begin with the several reason behind that University should not provide extra education because it create the conflicts among the student in other words when University provide the extra education to poor students then it gives birth to the discrimination between the classmate owing to this student not only do conflicts with each other but also they are not able to to do co-oporate with them apart from this if a student do conflicts with each other then it also put environmental impact on their study. Moving towards it is also the main reason wastage of money of University as some students are not interested to do study but they want to meet new people due to this university waste their seats which will proven negative for other students who are willing to enroll in university on the other side some argue that University should provide cheap course for low income family which is perfect method for them as well as children can easily afford these education owing to this they not only become capable to do study in university but also they do not have to face any difficulty regarding financial problem. Moreover University also provide loans and scholarship to poor students so that they are able to become successful by study at University. To conclude although there are some merits to provide scholarship to low income students, but it is the main cause of discrimination and it also create conflicts amongst other students.
It is a debatable issue that low income family who belongs to poor family
usually
find it difficult to enrollment in the
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university
for their higher
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education
while others oppose that tertiary
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education
should
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provide
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some
amenities to the children
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so
that they are able to do their
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study
in easy way
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I
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agree
with this statement up to large extent and this essay will give assertion with
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agree
side of contention
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before
explicate my logical example and conclusion in upcoming paragraph. To
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with the several reason behind that
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University
should not
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provide
extra
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education
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because
it
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create
the
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conflicts
among the
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student
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words when
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University
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provide
the extra
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education
to poor
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students
then it gives birth to the discrimination between the classmate owing to this
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student
not
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only
do
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conflicts
with each
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other
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but
also
they are not able
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co-oporate
with them apart from this if a
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student
do
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conflicts
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other then
it
also
put environmental impact on their
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study
. Moving towards it is
also
the main reason wastage of money of
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University
as
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some
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students
are not interested to do
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study
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but
they want to
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meet
new
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people
due to this
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university
waste their seats which will
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proven
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negative
for
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other
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students
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university
on the
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side
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some
argue that
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University
should
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provide
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cheap
course for low income family which is perfect method for them
as well
as children can
easily
afford these
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education
owing to this they not
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become capable to do
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study
in
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face any difficulty regarding financial problem.
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University
also
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loans and scholarship to poor
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students
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so
that they are able to become successful by
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study
at
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University
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To conclude
although there are
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merits to
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provide
scholarship to low income
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students
,
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it is the main cause of discrimination and it
also
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create
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conflicts
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amongst
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other
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students
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IELTS essay Poor students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to get access to the university education some people think University should make it easier for them to do study?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
329 words
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