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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? Kwn11
It is an undeniable fact water plays a vital role in human life. Nowadays, one of the main concerns of the human beings is water pollution which can threaten both humans and the environment. In this essay, I will explore some of the issues and negative effects associated with this type of pollution caused by car's emission and dumping wastes. One of the main causes of water pollution is emissions produced by cars. In other words, these emissions including damaging chemical particles, such as carbon and sulphur dioxide, can contaminate rainwater, run-off and water supplies. For example, it is confirmed by many scientists that the rate of water contamination in urban areas is often far more than other places, such as suburbs or rural areas, as many people in large cities tend to use their private cars, and this can ultimately release a huge amount of emissions into the air. In spite of the fact that air pollution in itself can produce a lot of health-related problems, such as respiratory diseases and eye irritation, it can also cause many water-related diseases like cholera and typhoid affecting people's lives in the long run. Another obvious cause of water contamination is dumping wastes into the ocean. That is to say, sewage and trashes released into the ocean can lead to marine pollution. Many poor countries, for instance, dump household garbage into the seas as there are not enough landfills, and this can eventually pollute the ocean. Dumping these pollutants can have knock-on effects on sea species such as fish, dolphins and sharks, and therefore, it can threaten the life of these type of animals, leading to the extinction of them. In addition, as many people consume seafood, this contamination can transmit to the human's body and produce serious problems such as poisoning. To sum up, while human activities are the main cause of water pollution and produce many problems for both humans and the sea environment, these problems are not insurmountable and can easily be addressed. If the governments prohibited sea dumping and imposed stricter laws on the usage of private cars, this problem would be perfectly solved.
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water
plays a vital role in
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human
life. Nowadays, one of the main concerns of the
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human
beings is
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water
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pollution
which can threaten both
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humans
and the environment. In this essay, I will explore
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some of the
issues and
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negative
effects associated with this type of
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pollution
caused by car's
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emission
and
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dumping
wastes.

One of the main
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causes
of
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water
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pollution
is
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emissions
produced by cars.
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, these
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emissions
including damaging chemical particles, such as carbon and
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sulphur
dioxide, can contaminate rainwater, run-off and
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water
supplies.
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by
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many
scientists that the rate of
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contamination in urban areas is
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far more than other places, such as suburbs or rural areas, as
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people
in large cities tend to
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their private cars, and this can
ultimately
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emissions
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pollution
in itself can produce
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health-related
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water-related diseases like cholera and typhoid affecting
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of
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contamination is
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dumping
wastes into the ocean.
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pollution
.
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seas
as there are not
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enough
landfills, and this can
eventually
pollute the ocean.
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Dumping
these pollutants can have knock-on effects on
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species such as fish, dolphins and sharks, and
therefore
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In addition
, as
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consume seafood, this contamination can transmit to the human's body and produce serious
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problems
such as poisoning.

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activities are the main
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water
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pollution
and produce
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problems
for both
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humans
and the
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sea
environment, these
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problems
are not insurmountable and can
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governments
prohibited
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sea
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dumping
and imposed stricter laws on the usage of private cars, this
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problem
would be
perfectly
solved.
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IELTS essay Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society?

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