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Please tell us about a time when you showed great initiative. What influence did your actions have on your life and/or the people around you?

When I was in my 9th grade, The Election Commission of India hosted various literary and cultural events around the country. My teachers selected a couple of my batchmates along with me for the mock parliament event. The first round's deadline was a week and a half away. I was excited because not only I was given the lead role of a Prime minister but also this was my first time in a mock event. I took the initiative of preparing the entire script. Furthermore, I started my research on mock parliaments and within half a week, I was ready with the roles and script. Since it was politics that we needed to talk about, I had to be extremely cautious while writing the dialouges and also while portraying the real life politicians.
When I was in my 9th grade, The Election Commission of India hosted various literary and cultural
events
around the country. My teachers selected a couple of my
batchmates
along with me for the mock parliament
event
. The
first
round's deadline was a week and a half away. I
was excited
because
not
only
I was
given
the lead role of a Prime minister
but
also
this was my
first
time in a mock
event
. I took the initiative of preparing the entire script.

Furthermore
, I
started
my research on mock parliaments and within half a week, I was ready with the roles and script. Since it was politics that we needed to talk about, I had to be
extremely
cautious while writing the
dialouges
and
also
while portraying the real life politicians.
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IELTS essay Please tell us about a time when you showed great initiative. What influence did your actions have on your life and/or the people around you?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
133 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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