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Please give a proposal on the time capsule with 3 objects that can impress the future generation.

Please give a proposal on the time capsule with 3 objects that can impress the future generation. pRKY3
1. Introduction We would like to put forward the following proposal to the class teacher pertaining to the time capsule. This proposal, which has been prepared by the 4D students, will present our recommendation for the 3 objects to be put into the time capsule, with the reasons behind and the details of the objects. 2. Items to be put into the time capsule The 3 objects should be chosen from their technological development, which could enlighten the future generation about the development of advanced technology. Their influences, which could able to remind the appealing craze of different popular cultures, can also be a part of the criteria. 2. 1 PS4 A PS4, which is a home video gaming console released by Sony Interactive Entertainment in 2013, epitomizes the contemporary gaming culture. It has been sold 108. 9 million copies in 2019 and has become the best-sellers among the competitive gaming industry. The changes in the major popularity of gaming can be seen from PS4. Having a massive range of games, for example, interactive drama games, action games, and role-playing games, many people have been inspired and share their gaming process or provide walkthroughs on the video-sharing platform, YouTube. The rising of e-sports and live-streaming are then brought up by the console. Therefore, a PS4 would explain the hit of YouTube and e-sports. 2. 2 iPhone XR The iPhone XR, which is a smartphone designed and manufactured by Apple Inc. in 2018, is one of the best-selling phones in 2018 and 2019. The hit of the special design and the hardware is followed by many companies such as Samsung and Huawei. With the well-received camera, people love to take photos with it instead of using a digital camera. The trend of posting pictures on social media is also partly built up by its fine camera. The productions of Apple Inc. are always a craze regardless of the quality. Showing off to others, many people would buy it due to its fame. The iPhone could be the epitome of the effect of famous brands. 2. 3 Marvel Infinity Saga DVD The Marvel Cinematic Universe, an American media franchise and shared universe created by Marvel, is always a recognition of superhero movies. The Avengers: Endgame, which is the last Avengers movie from the saga grossed a total of $ 2. 8 million worldwide and become the highest-grossing film of all time. The Marvel Infinity Saga is not only the childhood for the 2000s people, but it is also the most successful movie series made by Marvel Studio, which appreciated by many Marvel die-hard fans. The themes behind each movie are thought-provoking. For example, the film Black Panther has a theme of keeping or changing the traditions. 3. Conclusion We strongly recommend putting a PS4, and iPhone XR and the Marvel Infinity Saga DVD to the time capsule, because they represent the trend of gaming, phones and movies respectively and different popular cultures are brought up by them. It is hoped that the proposal can be approved.
1. Introduction

We would like to put forward the following proposal to the
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class
teacher pertaining to the
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time
capsule. This proposal, which has
been prepared
by the 4D students, will present our recommendation for the 3 objects to
be put
into the
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time
capsule, with the reasons behind and the
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details
of the objects.

2. Items to
be put
into the
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time
capsule

The 3 objects should
be chosen
from their technological development, which could enlighten the future generation about the development of advanced technology. Their influences, which
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could able
to remind the

appealing craze of
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different
popular cultures, can
also
be a part of the criteria.

2. 1 PS4

A PS4, which is a home video
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gaming
console released by Sony Interactive Entertainment in 2013, epitomizes the contemporary
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gaming
culture. It has
been sold
108. 9 million copies in 2019 and has become the best-sellers among the competitive
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gaming
industry. The
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changes
in the major popularity of
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gaming
can be
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seen
from PS4. Having a massive range of
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games
,
for example
, interactive drama
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games
, action
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games
, and role-playing
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games
,
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many
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people
have
been inspired
and share their
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gaming
process or provide walkthroughs on the video-sharing platform, YouTube. The rising of e-sports and
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live
-streaming are then brought up by the console.
Therefore
, a PS4 would
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explain
the hit of YouTube and e-sports.

2. 2
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iPhone
XR

The iPhone XR, which is a smartphone designed and manufactured by Apple Inc. in 2018, is one of the best-selling phones in 2018 and 2019. The hit of the special design and the hardware
is followed
by
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many
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companies
such as Samsung and Huawei. With the well-received camera,
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people
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love
to take photos with it
instead
of using a digital camera. The trend of posting pictures on social media is
also
partly built up by its fine camera. The productions of Apple Inc. are always a craze regardless of the quality. Showing off to others,
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many
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people
would
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buy
it due to its fame. The iPhone could be the epitome of the effect of
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famous
brands.

2. 3
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Marvel
Infinity Saga DVD

The
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Marvel
Cinematic Universe, an American media franchise and shared universe created by
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Marvel
, is always a recognition of superhero
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movies
. The Avengers: Endgame, which is the last
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Avengers
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movie
from the saga grossed a total of
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$ 2
. 8 million worldwide and become the highest-grossing film of all
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time
. The
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Marvel
Infinity Saga is not
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only
the childhood for the 2000s
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people
,
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but
it is
also
the most successful
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movie
series made by
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Marvel
Studio, which appreciated by
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many
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Marvel
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die
-
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hard
fans. The themes behind each
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movie
are
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thought
-provoking.
For example
, the film Black Panther has a theme of keeping or changing the traditions.

3. Conclusion

We
strongly
recommend putting a PS4, and iPhone XR and the
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Marvel
Infinity Saga DVD to the
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time
capsule,
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because
they represent the trend of
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gaming
, phones and
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movies
respectively
and
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different
popular

cultures
are brought
up by them. It
is hoped
that the proposal can
be approved
.
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IELTS essay Please give a proposal on the time capsule with 3 objects that can impress the future generation.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
504 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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