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Please: - a) give up to three practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge, skills and connections you will gain from your scholarship. Possible tasks can be personal and/or professional; andb) list any possible constraints you think may preve v.1

Please: - a) give up to three practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge, skills and connections you will gain from your scholarship. Possible tasks can be personal and/or professional; andb) list any possible constraints you think may preve v. 1
Ancient and contemporary legacy of arts, crafts, music and humankind is preserved and exhibited in museums. Most of them levy entry fees. In my opinion, charging public is highly beneficial for both the museums and the visitors. This essay intends to discuss how the benefits of the aforementioned phenomenon outnumber its drawbacks. To start with, the museums incur a huge cost and efforts in maintaining and showcasing the exhibits. For instance, some of them even conduct seminars and talks on the important artefacts on display, especially for students and hobbyists to augment their knowledge. Moreover, some museums also appoint full time researchers and scholars to facilitate further research in their respective fields. Curators are required to ensure proper maintenance of the items. Subsequently, all this money has to be recovered and admission fees serve to be a crucial contributor to it. It is rightly said that free items are not valued appropriately by the public at large. Evidently, giving freebies to the masses will not make them respect and value the invaluable art being showcased at the museum. Admission charges, albeit, towards a lower side will go a long way in ensuring that only those who value the exhibits come and visit the museums. Consequently, the abuse of artefacts shall be considerably reduced. Although, many people will argue that museums get enough donations and support both from private and government bodies, but surely, it is not enough to ensure both the quality of the items as well as the visitor's respect towards the curators and their efforts. To conclude, entry fees will go a long way in sustaining the museums and its exhibits.
Ancient and contemporary legacy of arts, crafts, music and humankind
is preserved
and exhibited in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
. Most of them levy entry fees. In my opinion, charging public is
highly
beneficial for both the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
and the visitors. This essay intends to discuss how the benefits of the aforementioned phenomenon outnumber its drawbacks.

To
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start
with, the
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museums
incur a huge cost and efforts in maintaining and showcasing the exhibits.
For instance
,
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some
of them even conduct seminars and talks on the
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important
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artefacts
on display,
especially
for students and hobbyists to augment their knowledge.
Moreover
,
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some
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museums
also
appoint full time researchers and scholars to facilitate
further
research in their respective fields. Curators
are required
to ensure proper maintenance of the items.
Subsequently
, all this money
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has to
be recovered
and admission fees serve to be a crucial contributor to it.

It is
rightly
said that free items are not valued
appropriately
by the public at large.
Evidently
, giving freebies to the masses will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them respect and value the invaluable art
being showcased
at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museum
. Admission charges, albeit, towards a lower side will go a long way in ensuring that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
those who value the exhibits
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
and visit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
.
Consequently
, the abuse of
Possible spelling mistake. 'artefacts' is British English.
artefacts
shall be
considerably
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
.

Although,
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many
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people
will argue that
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museums
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
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enough
donations and support both from private and
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government
bodies,
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but
surely
, it is not
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enough
to ensure both the quality of the items
Probable usage error. Use "and" after 'both'.
as well as
the visitor's respect towards the curators and their efforts.
To conclude
, entry fees will go a long way in sustaining the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
museums
and its exhibits.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Please: - a) give up to three practical examples of how you intend to use the knowledge, skills and connections you will gain from your scholarship. Possible tasks can be personal and/or professional; andb) list any possible constraints you think may preve v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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