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plans to have a surprise party for one of my family members

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A wedding anniversary is always a very meaningful and special day. I want to give my parents the best on that day. So I plan to celebrate the 25th wedding anniversary for whom I love so much. About 2 days after my parents' anniversary, my brother and I keep a secret to choose gifts for my mom and dad, maybe a couple of items like shoes, clothes. . . After that, we buy decorations like balloons, candles, flowers, print some pictures of our parents together. . . As time goes on, my parents get busier and busier so they gradually forget special anniversaries. So, on their wedding anniversary, when my parents go to work, my brother and I secretly decorate the bedroom with colorful balloons, hang pictures, stick meaningful words on the wall, next we go to the kitchen to prepare the food they like, plug a flowerpot to increase the romance. Then we design a beautiful cake and order it at a bakery near our house Before they return home we perfectly arrange the good food and special gift we bought. We hope they will be surprised and happy when they see this thoughtful preparation. My family will enjoy every moment together and love the food we cook and our gifts. This will be an extremely wonderful and memorable day that will make my parents closer and love each other for a long time.
A wedding
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anniversary
is always a
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meaningful and special day. I want to give my
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parents
the best on that day.
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So
I plan to celebrate the 25th wedding
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anniversary
for whom I
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love
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so
much. About 2 days after my parents'
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anniversary
, my brother and I
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keep
a secret to choose gifts for my mom and dad, maybe a couple of items like shoes, clothes.
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After that, we
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buy
decorations like balloons, candles, flowers, print
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some
pictures of our
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parents
together.
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As time goes on, my
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parents
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get
busier and busier
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so
they
gradually
forget special
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anniversaries
.
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, on their wedding
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anniversary
, when my
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parents
go to work, my brother and I
secretly
decorate the bedroom with colorful balloons, hang pictures, stick meaningful words on the wall,
next
we go to the kitchen to prepare the food they like, plug a flowerpot to increase the romance. Then we design a
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beautiful
cake and order it at a bakery near our
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house
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Before
they return home we
perfectly
arrange the
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good
food and special gift we
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bought
. We hope they will
be surprised
and happy when they
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see
this thoughtful preparation. My family will enjoy every moment together and
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love
the food we cook and our gifts. This will be an
extremely
wonderful and memorable day that will
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make
my
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parents
closer and
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love
each other for a long time.
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IELTS essay plans to have a surprise party for one of my family members

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  American English
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