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physical exercise should be a required part o everyday school? ? other people believe that students should spend the whole day in an academic class! agree or disagree? ? v.2

physical exercise should be a required part o everyday school? ? other people believe that students should spend the whole day in an academic class! agree or disagree? ? v. 2
Education plays a significant role in students' lives. It is important because it helps students to have a better future. If the people' s opinions are going to be considered, some of them prefer to spend the whole day in an academic class; others would choose to attend a physical exercise class. In my view, I believe that students should attend a physical class as a part of their daily schedual for the following essential reasons. First, physical exercises assist students to comprehend a subject in a simple manner. In fact, attending a physical exercise class will simplify concepts and ideas for students. Consequently, students will be able to master a material faster and easier. For exmple, one day, when I was in a Pharmacy College, I had a chemsity exam and I had a difficulty understanding the acid-base reaction. Normally, I would go to the chemisrty class in order to collect information from the professor while he was explaining a lecture. One time, the professor allowed us to go to the chemisrty lab to do an experiment about the acid- base reaction. In the labrotary, I did the experiment by myself by adding the hydrocloric acid into a sodium salt and after a while I noticed the color changed and it started bubbling. Even though the exeriment was hard to do it by myself, I was able to undersand how the reaction happened and I learned from the mistakes that I did in that experment. As a result, the information stuck in my mind and I was able to explain it in the test. So, it is necessary to consider the physical classes as a part of an educational plan. Second, attending physical exercises classes is fun. As a matter of fact, engaging students into activites during class will motivate students to concentrate more, and that will positively affect their grades. For instance, one day, when I was in a Pharmacy College, I had to take a phamaceutical technology class in order to graduate. Frankly, in the class the professor was talking about the manufacturing of the tablets and the capsules. The lecture was so boring as I was not able to imagine how the manufacturing process were going. One time, I attend a laboratory about the tablet producing. The professor divided us into groups, each group had to make a tablet. While I was wroking with my peers, adding the materials, measuring the amounts of the active ingrediants and put it in the oven, I was so interested to see the final product and know if we did right. Finally, I took A+ in my test. If there were no labrotaries about this topic, I would not be able to even pass my test. As you can see how theis laboratories are substantial for students. in conclusion based on the aspects revealed, I firmly concur that Universities should promote physical excercise to studetns not only because it aids them to understand a subject but also to motivate them.
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; others would choose to attend a
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exercise
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class
. In my view, I believe that
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students
should attend a
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physical
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as a part of their daily
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for the following essential reasons.

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,
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physical
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assist
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students
to comprehend a subject
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in a simple manner
. In fact, attending a
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physical
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exercise
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class
will simplify concepts and
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ideas
for
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students
.
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,
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students
will be
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to master a material faster and easier. For
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exmple
, one day, when I was in a Pharmacy College, I had a
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chemsity
exam and I had a difficulty understanding the acid-base reaction.
Normally
, I would go to the
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chemisrty
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class
in order to collect information from the
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professor
while he was explaining a lecture. One time, the
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professor
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allowed
us to go to the
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chemisrty
lab to do an experiment about the acid- base reaction. In the
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labrotary
, I did the experiment by myself by adding the
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hydrocloric
acid into a sodium salt and after a while I noticed the color
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changed
and it
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started
bubbling.
Even though
the
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exeriment
was
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hard
to do it by myself, I was
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to
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undersand
how the reaction happened and I learned from the mistakes that I did in that
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experment
.
As a result
, the information stuck in my mind and I was
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able
to
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explain
it in the
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test
.
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, it is necessary to consider the
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physical
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classes
as a part of an educational plan.

Second, attending
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physical
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exercises
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classes
is fun. As a matter of fact, engaging
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students
into
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activites
during
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class
will motivate
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students
to concentrate more, and that will
positively
affect their grades.
For instance
, one day, when I was in a Pharmacy College, I had to take a
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technology
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class
in order to graduate.
Frankly
, in the
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class
the
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professor
was talking about the manufacturing of the tablets and the capsules. The lecture was
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so
boring as I was not
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able
to imagine how the manufacturing process were going. One time, I attend a laboratory about the tablet producing. The
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professor
divided us into groups, each group had to
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make
a tablet. While I was
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wroking
with my peers, adding the materials, measuring the amounts of the active
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ingrediants
and put it in the oven, I was
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so
interested to
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see
the final product and know if we did right.
Finally
, I took A+ in my
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test
. If there were no
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labrotaries
about this topic, I would not be
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able
to even pass my
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test
. As you can
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see
how
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laboratories are substantial for students.

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in
conclusion based on the aspects revealed, I
firmly
concur that Universities should promote
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physical
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excercise
to
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studetns
not
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because
it aids them to understand a subject
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also
to motivate them.
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IELTS essay physical exercise should be a required part o everyday school? ? other people believe that students should spend the whole day in an academic class! agree or disagree? ? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
500 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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