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photo journalism and camera phones.

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The lecture discusses about the role of the camera phones and photography in the world of journalism. Whereas, the reading passage describes about the accessabilty of the photography in any place and any time due to the camera phones and the strong impact of it on the current society. First of all, the professor states about the difference between the sophistication of the photography that is used in journalism than the photos taken by common people. However, he does not deny the threat posed to the photo journalism due to the photography by common people using the device as simple as the camera phone. Secondly, the lecturer describes the disadvantage of the pictures taken by common people and added into news by stating that in journalism it is very important to consider the ethical issues those are involved in selecting which photos should be included and which should be excluded. Therefore, the photos by people often crosses the bounderies of ethical issues. Finally, though according to the reading passage people use the phone at right times and right places by using the camera phones, nevertheless the photo journalism will be in high demand always due to the quality and special techniques used for the photography from the real situations. Hence, from the history of journalism it is clear that those pictures are still considered to be great because of the techniques and qualities of the pictures taken by professional people.
The lecture
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discusses about the
role of the
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camera
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phones
and photography in the world of journalism. Whereas, the reading passage
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describes
about the
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accessabilty
of the photography in any place and any time due to the
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camera
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phones
and the strong impact of it on the
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current
society.

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First of all
, the professor states about the difference between the sophistication of the photography
that is
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used
in journalism than the
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photos
taken by common
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people
.
However
, he does not deny the threat posed to the
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photo
journalism due to the photography by common
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people
using the device as simple as the
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camera
phone.

Secondly
, the lecturer
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describes
the disadvantage of the pictures taken by common
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people
and
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added
into news by stating that in journalism it is
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very
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important
to consider the ethical issues those
are involved
in selecting which
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photos
should
be included
and which should
be excluded
.
Therefore
, the
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photos
by
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people
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often
crosses the
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bounderies
of ethical issues.

Finally
, though according to the reading passage
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people
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use
the
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phone
at right times and right places by using the
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camera
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phones
,
nevertheless
the
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photo
journalism will be in high demand always due to the quality and special techniques
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used
for the photography from the real situations.
Hence
, from the history of journalism it is
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clear
that those pictures are
still
considered to be great
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because
of the techniques and qualities of the pictures taken by professional
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people
.
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IELTS essay photo journalism and camera phones.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
240 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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