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People's value possession

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Nowadays, people's value depends on social status and material possessions. Consequently, there's no respect and worth for honour, kindness and trust. Well, I'm agree with this comment. Becuase, people are more judgemental than before and they judge by social status and material possessions neither trust nor honesty. According to today's situation, the people getting more judgemental day by day. Therefore, the people respect that person who have some power whether it's political or social. Such as if a person have any social problem then that person would like go to the powerfull person with his complain because the man who have power he solve this with his power. On the other side, if this man will go to the honest person who have not any type of power without his kindness and honesty that cannot give any solution of that problem. In terms of old-fashioned values, it's true that there's a lot of people still have in the world who have that kindness and honesty. but, end of the day they cannot they cannot able to do anything for public. but they have respect they earned it with their honesty and kindness. In my opinion, well, end of the we all are human. So, we need to show our respect each and every human whether he have power social status or honesty trust worthy person.
Nowadays,
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people
's value depends on
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social
status and material possessions.
Consequently
, there's no
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respect
and worth for
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honour
,
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kindness
and trust. Well, I'm
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agree
with this comment.
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Becuase
,
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people
are more
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judgemental
than
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before and
they judge by
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social
status and material possessions neither trust nor honesty.

According to
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today
's situation, the
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people
getting more
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judgemental
day by day.
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, the
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people
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respect
that
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person
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who
have
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some
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power
whether it's political or
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social
. Such as if a
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person
have any
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social
problem then that
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person
would like go to the
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powerfull
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with his
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complain
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the
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man
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have
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power
he
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solve
this with his
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power
. On the other side, if this
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man
will go to the honest
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person
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who
have not any type of
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without his
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and
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that cannot give any solution of that problem.

In terms of
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-fashioned values, it's true that there's
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still
have in the world
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kindness
and
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.
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but
,
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of the day
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they cannot they cannot
able to do anything for public.
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but
they have
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respect
they earned it with their
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honesty
and
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kindness
. In my opinion, well,
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end
of
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the we
all are human.
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, we need to
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show
our
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respect
each and every human whether he
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have
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power
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social
status or
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honesty
trust worthy
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person
.

IELTS essay People's value possession

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
225 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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