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People's shopping habits depends more on the age group they belong to than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have always been seeking for their basic needs, but nowadays purchasing certain products has become as a regular behavior of the individuals in many societies. Some argue that people's shopping habits is mostly influenced by under which age group they are classified. However, I contend that there are far more relevant factors that should be taken into account accordingly. To begin with, it is true that same-aged people have many interests as well as numbers of similar needs in common. This would lead them to have similar behavior in choosing ways of buying the goods. The little- aged children, for instance, are always looking for toys and entertaining objects, since quantity and variety is their shopping priority; whereas for middle ages the quality and after sales services of a product would be highlighted as the most significance for their choice. Therefore, it is possible to classify costumers based on their age in order to examine their shopping habits, yet whether it is the only major factor in this area would be certainly questionable. The factors which could affect people's regulars in shopping could be determined based on their social strata, their level of education and their local culture. The advantaged group in the society has different shopping habits in comparison to disadvantaged one regardless of their age factor. The widening gap between rich and poor is a significant determinant in their shopping habits. Furthermore, the intellectual people choose their needs based on academic factors and also their concerns about price, quality and delivery condition, whereas ordinary ones just go shopping for enjoy and excitement. To conclude, it is in the realms of possibility to partly categorize people's shopping habits based on their age group. However, there are more aspects as yardstick for having a scientific and practical approach to examine people's regular ways of meeting their needs in a society.
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mostly
influenced by under which
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age
group they
are classified
.
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, I contend that there are far more relevant
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factors
that should
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into account
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.

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people
have
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many
interests
as well
as numbers of similar
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needs
in common. This would lead them to have similar behavior in choosing ways of buying the
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goods
. The
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little
- aged children,
for instance
, are always looking for toys and entertaining objects, since quantity and variety is their
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shopping
priority; whereas for middle
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ages
the quality and after sales services of a product would
be highlighted
as the most significance for their choice.
Therefore
, it is possible to classify costumers based on their
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age
in order to examine their
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shopping
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habits
,
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whether it is the
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only
major
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factor
in this area would be
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questionable.

The
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which could affect
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people's
regulars in
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shopping
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based on their social strata, their level of education and their local culture. The advantaged group in the society has
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different
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shopping
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habits
in comparison
to disadvantaged one regardless of their
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age
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factor
. The widening gap between rich and poor is a significant determinant in their
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shopping
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habits
.
Furthermore
, the intellectual
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people
choose their
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needs
based on academic
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factors
and
also
their concerns about price, quality and delivery condition, whereas ordinary ones
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go
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shopping
for enjoy and excitement.

To conclude
, it is in the
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realms of possibility
to partly categorize
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people's
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shopping
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habits
based on their
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age
group.
However
, there are more aspects as yardstick for having a scientific and practical approach to examine
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people's
regular ways of meeting their
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needs
in a society.
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IELTS essay People's shopping habits depends more on the age group they belong to than other factors.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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