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People who have different skills are more likely to be successful than people with only one skill, do you agree or disagree on the same? v.2

People who have different skills are more likely to be successful than people with only one skill, on the same? v. 2
As we know that the world is advancing and that, knowledge has become the key to everything. A successful person need to have knowledge about the field he/she is working in. In other words, they need to be skilled in that particular domain. Not only that, a combination of various skills is also important. Hence, I agree that a person with potpourri of skills is likely to be more successful than a person with single skill. Technology is growing day by day and thus the most important skill that an individual should have is how to use that technology. Computer for instance, is one of the greatest development in the field of technology and one should know how to operate it. The main reason for this is that computers have made our life a lot easier. Anything and everything can be done using a computer, be it a small task like a making a presentation or any complex computation like finding the complexity of a massive JAVA code. And therefore, one should at least have basic technical skills. Apart from the skills mentioned above, soft skills are also equally important. Some examples of soft skills are good communicator, team leader, hard worker etc. Technical skills are important, but if someone is not able to present those skills to people or any organization then the skills are of no use as they are getting wasted. For example, me and my friend both are good at developing various applications and have made several projects. Once during our campus recruitment we both got shortlisted for the interview but at the end only I got the job. When asked the interviewers the reason for the same, they said that my friend could not explain them his projects properly. In short, he lacked the skill of communicating to people and they were hiring people who can talk to clients very well. To put it briefly, without having skills a person is going to land up nowhere in today’s world. And to achieve something great in life and become successful, an aggregation of skills various skills is must.
As we know that the world is advancing and that, knowledge has become the key to everything. A successful
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person
need to have knowledge about the field he/she is working in.
In other words
, they need to
be skilled
in that particular domain. Not
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only
that, a combination of various
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skills
is
also
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important
.
Hence
, I
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agree
that a
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person
with potpourri of
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skills
is likely to be more successful than a
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person
with single
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skill
.

Technology is growing day by day and
thus
the most
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important
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skill
that an individual should have is how to
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use
that technology. Computer
for instance
, is one of the greatest development in the field of technology and one should know how to operate it. The main reason for this is that computers have made our life a lot easier. Anything and everything can
be done
using a computer, be it a
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small
task like a making a presentation or any complex computation like finding the complexity of a massive JAVA code. And
therefore
, one should at least have basic technical
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skills
.

Apart from the
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skills
mentioned above, soft
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skills
are
also
equally
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important
.
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Some
examples of soft
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skills
are
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good
communicator, team leader,
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hard
worker etc. Technical
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skills
are
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important
,
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but
if someone is not able to present those
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skills
to
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people
or any organization then the
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skills
are of no
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use
as they are getting wasted.
For example
, me and my friend both are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at developing various applications and have made several projects. Once during our campus recruitment we both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
shortlisted for the interview
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but
at the
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end
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only
I
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got
the job. When asked the interviewers the reason for the same, they said that my friend could not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
them his projects
properly
. In short, he lacked the
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skill
of communicating to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
people and
they were hiring
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people
who can talk to clients
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very
well.

To put it
briefly
, without having
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skills
a
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person
is going to land up nowhere in
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today
’s world. And to achieve something great in life and become successful, an aggregation of
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skills
various
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skills
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay People who have different skills are more likely to be successful than people with only one skill, on the same? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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