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People today change their jobs and even begin new careers more than ever before. This can cause difficulties for companies, as well as the individuals concerned. What challenges do they both encounter? What strategies are there to meet these challenges?

People today change their jobs and even begin new careers more than ever before. This can cause difficulties for companies, as well as the individuals concerned. What challenges do they both encounter? What strategies are there to meet these challenges? XGqq8
Recently, people have had a tendency to start new jobs instead of keep working for the same place. This fact give birth to a hardship for not only enterprise, but also each person. If people try to quit a job and set up their new one, they will face a difficulty to get a business again because there are many people who want to get a work and it will be competitive. Furthermore, the companies will find it a difficult to keep their sales because of lack of worker. In order not to make worse, I think that the government has to issue a policy like employing people until they die. The problem such as getting hard to get a job again and recession of companies will be happened if a lot of people start to find another business because some people is trying to start a new business except for them. Besides, this will lead a decreasing the number of worker and cause the enterprise to bother from a point of sales. What is worse, if this trend will keep going, the recession in a country will be triggered. In order to prevent from quitting job and keep economical balance in a country, government should take it consider to soak the idea of hiring the employee for good. This policy will make workers want to stay the company because if they are employed until they die, their salary will be getting higher year by year. In addition, the companies will be able to make their sales unchangeable. In conclusion, the lack of employees will cause a recession after all. Therefore, in order to stop the situation like economy is not going well, I believe that government has to make the enterprises install the thought to fire employees forever.
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keep
working for the same place. This fact give birth to a hardship for not
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only
enterprise,
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but
also
each person. If
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people
try to quit a
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job
and set up their new one, they will face a difficulty to
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get
a business again
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because
there are
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many
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people
who want to
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get
a work and it will be competitive.
Furthermore
, the
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companies
will find it a difficult to
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keep
their sales
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because
of lack of worker. In order not to
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make
worse, I
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think
that the
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government
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has to
issue a policy like employing
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people
until they
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die
.

The problem such as getting
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hard
to
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get
a
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job
again and recession of
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companies
will
be happened
if
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a lot of
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people
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start
to find another business
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because
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some
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people
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is
trying to
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start
a new business
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except for
them.
Besides
, this will lead a decreasing the number of worker and cause the enterprise to bother from a point of sales. What is worse, if this trend will
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keep
going, the recession in a country will
be triggered
.

In order to
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prevent
from quitting
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job
and
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keep
economical balance in a country,
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government
should take it
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consider to soak
the
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idea
of hiring the employee for
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good
. This policy will
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make
workers want to stay the
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company
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because
if they
are employed
until they
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die
, their salary will be getting higher year by year.
In addition
, the
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companies
will be able to
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make
their sales unchangeable.

In conclusion
, the lack of employees will cause a recession
after all
.
Therefore
, in order to
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stop
the situation like economy is not going well, I believe that
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government
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has to
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make
the enterprises install the
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thought
to fire employees forever.
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IELTS essay People today change their jobs and even begin new careers more than ever before. This can cause difficulties for companies, as well as the individuals concerned. What challenges do they both encounter? What strategies are there to meet these challenges?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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