Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

People think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food

People think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food m9eOn
Few believe that if authorities impose a higher tax on junk food, it is going to motivate masses to consume food which is nutritious and beneficial to health. I assert that it may reduce the ingestion to some extend but not that much efficient means to steer the general public in their eating habits. To begin with, the increase in the price of fast food is only going to impact the weaker segment of society. In other words, only poverty drive people will think to substitute their dishes because of this cost increase. The affluent course will last to go for their prefered choice; this means the only segment of society is going to be affected because of the high cost. Therefore, it is not the best answer to the issue. As opposed to accelerating the taxes government should attempt to teach the general public about the adverse effects of eating unhealthy meals by organising educational efforts. Moving farther, the predominant reason behind this tendency of preferring ready to cook food is insufficient time. These days both female and male are functioning and career-oriented and do not have spare time to cook their meal so that they opt to packaged no matter at what price. However, the state can alter the eating habit of the public by making healthy food readily available so that it can be convenient to elect for freshly cooked foods. Even though, if the cost of healthy meals will be high individuals will pick them over unhealthy diets. In summary, unequivocally putting higher taxation may bring several changes in the eating pattern and taste of the customer but not that far. Educating individuals about the health benefit of eating healthy food and making it readily available will probably be a better way to bring the shift.
Few believe that if authorities impose a higher tax on junk
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
, it is going to motivate masses to consume
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
which is nutritious and beneficial to health. I assert that it may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the ingestion to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Did you mean the noun "extent"?
extend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not that much efficient means to steer the
Consider using "public".
general public
in their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
habits.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, the increase in the price of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
going to impact the weaker segment of society.
In other words
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
poverty drive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
to substitute their dishes
because of this
cost increase. The affluent course will last to go for their
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "preferred", the past tense form of the verb 'prefer'?
prefered
choice; this means the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
segment of society is going to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the high cost.
Therefore
, it is not the best answer to the issue.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
opposed to accelerating the
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "taxes'" or "tax's", "taxis's"?
taxes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should attempt to teach the
Consider using "public".
general public
about the adverse effects of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
unhealthy meals by
Possible spelling mistake. 'organising' is British English.
organising
educational efforts.

Moving farther, the predominant reason behind this tendency of preferring ready to cook
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
is insufficient time. These days both female and male are functioning and career-oriented and do not have spare time to cook their meal
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they opt
Did you mean "to package"?
to packaged
no matter at what price.
However
, the state can alter the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
habit of the public by making healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
readily
available
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it can be convenient to elect for
freshly
cooked
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
.
Even though
, if the cost of healthy meals will be high individuals will pick them over unhealthy diets.

In summary,
unequivocally
putting higher taxation may bring several
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
pattern and taste of the customer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not that far. Educating individuals about the health benefit of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eating
healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
and making it
readily
available will
probably
be a better way to bring the shift.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay People think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts