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People prefer to go shopping in the supermarket rather than small shops or local markets. Why has this happened? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

People prefer to go shopping in the supermarket rather than small shops or local markets. Why has this happened? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? 0nXn1
An increasing number of shoppers are doing their shopping in supermarkets instead of small local shops. It can be argued that the main reason for this is the cheaper price of the goods for sale. In my opinion this is a positive step which will benefit less well-off people and allow them to eat good food cheaply. Firstly, many more people shop at large supermarkets due to the price difference as opposed to local shops. Supermarkets have more spending power and can pass on any savings in price to their customers. Especially for food, supermarket chains can buy in bulk from farmers for a considerably lower price. For example, the UK retail chain Tesco only pays farmers 10 pence per litre for milk and can make a fair profit margin on reselling whereas local shops cannot pay this price and would charge customers more. Secondly, I believe that for some customers this lower price policy is extremely beneficial. Poor people cannot afford good quality food at high street prices so being able to do their shopping for less is a major benefit for them. Eating well is a pre-requisite for good health so this can only have good consequences for less well-off people. For example, research from the university of York suggests that people who buy from big markets as opposed to local shops can save up to 40% on their weekly shop. In conclusion, the increasing number of shoppers at supermarkets are doing so due to the price difference when compared to local shops which can only be a positive development for those people who are on low incomes.
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small
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local
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shops
. It can
be argued
that the main reason for this is the cheaper
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price
of the
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for sale. In my opinion this is a
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positive
step which will benefit less well-off
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them to eat
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good
food
cheaply
.
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more
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at large supermarkets due to the
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price
difference as opposed to
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local
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shops
. Supermarkets have more spending power and can pass on any savings in
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price
to their customers.
Especially
for food, supermarket chains can
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buy
in bulk from farmers for a
considerably
lower
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price
.
For example
, the UK retail chain
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Tesco
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pays farmers 10 pence per
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for milk and can
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make
a
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fair
profit margin on reselling whereas
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local
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shops
cannot pay this
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price
and would charge customers more.

Secondly
, I believe that for
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customers this lower
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policy is
extremely
beneficial. Poor
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cannot afford
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good
quality food at high street
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prices
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being able to do their shopping for less is a major benefit for them. Eating well is a
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good
health
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consequences for less well-off
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people
.
For example
, research from the university of York suggests that
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people
who
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buy
from
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big
markets as opposed to
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local
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shops
can save up to 40% on their weekly shop.

In conclusion
, the increasing number of shoppers at supermarkets are doing
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due to the
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difference when compared to
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local
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shops
which can
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only
be a
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positive
development for those
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people
who are on low incomes.
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IELTS essay People prefer to go shopping in the supermarket rather than small shops or local markets. Why has this happened? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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