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people in society work in many different settings and for a variety of reasons what do you think is the main reasons why peoplr have jobs?

people in society work in many different settings and for a variety of reasons what do you think is the main reasons why peoplr have jobs? 73OlA
Everyone have different feelings and interest towards something. A number of people, adore to run their own business while others like to do jobs. Besides, this everyone has main reasons, which i will explore in the following paragraphs. First, people think it is good for them to have jobs because one can't feel bored or depressed as they were busy in their work. An individual do jobs for feel happier about their life. To drop from my own experience, a couple of years ago, one of my neighbour offer me a job which is related to social work and fortunately, i love doing work or involved in social work. The day when i joined in this activities, i feel so peaceful and happiest one. Secondly, A number of people in this world do jobs to save money for their future. Some becomes compelled to work even if it is out of their interest because of poverty. From my own point of view, one become constrain, to work for their children, to eliminate the margin of poverty. On the other hand, As we know everyone has different interest. A couple of people may have different skills. some wants to learn nee skills. Many people involved in different works to enhance their skills. To drag from my own experience, i teach some students in past year. When i used to tutor them, i gain extra knowledge. I get a chance to enhance my communication skills. In conclusion, their are many people and they have variety of reasons to do work. some individual work for their satisfication, to save money for future use or to develop nee skills. I think, most of the people do jobs to save money for future use.
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feelings and interest towards something. A number of
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, adore to run their
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business while others like to do
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jobs
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, this everyone has main reasons, which
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will explore in the following paragraphs.

First
,
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good
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jobs
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because
one can't feel bored or depressed as they were busy in their
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work
. An individual do
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jobs
for feel happier about their life. To drop from my
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own
experience, a couple of years ago, one of my
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offer me a
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which
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to social
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and
fortunately
,
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doing
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or involved in social
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. The day when
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activities,
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feel
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peaceful and happiest one.

Secondly
, A number of
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in this world do
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jobs
to save money for their future.
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becomes compelled to
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even if it is out of their interest
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of poverty. From my
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point of view, one become constrain, to
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for their children, to eliminate the margin of poverty.

On the other hand
, As we know everyone has
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different
interest. A couple of
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people
may have
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skills
.
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some
wants to learn
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.
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involved in
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works to enhance their
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. To drag from my
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experience,
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teach
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students in past year. When
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to tutor them,
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gain extra knowledge. I
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a chance to enhance my communication
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skills
.

In conclusion
,
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are
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people and
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work
.
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individual
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satisfication
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or to develop
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, most of the
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do
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jobs
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IELTS essay people in society work in many different settings and for a variety of reasons what do you think is the main reasons why peoplr have jobs?

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