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People have been arguing about whether or not to divert from treatment to expend a huge amount of money from health's budget for care-related education as well as prevention measures.

People have been arguing about whether or not to divert from treatment to expend a huge amount of money from health's budget for care-related education as well as prevention measures. 9wL0x
People have been arguing about whether or not to divert from treatment to expend a huge amount of money from health's budget for care-related education as well as prevention measures. While there are some strong opinions against this statement, I still believe that this policy has a great number of benefits for not only the health aspects of people but also the governments. If a person is aware that "prevention is better than cure" they will protect themselves by vaccinating and doing exercise to raise their health. Therefore this can help people decrease their disease to some extent and hence easier to treat, especially lightening their financial burden when they need treatment. For example, the Covid 19 epidemic has shown us how important prevention is, especially with new diseases and viruses. In the last 15 months, nearly 5 million people in the world have died from the Covid 19 and cost more than 16 trillion dollars worldwide. On the other hand, when people take responsibility for their health, it is not only for themselves but also for family, society and government. Take Vietnam as an example, during the Covid 19 period we have fought the epidemic very well in the three first stages until the 4th broke out again mainly due to the negligence and subjectivity of residents. In this time, Vietnam has had people infected in the community and the number of death has increased to over 21 thousand people. According to the Department of Financial Reporting, Vietnam lost hundreds of billion due to the Covid 19 epidemic. In conclusion, I firmly believe that "prevention is better than cure" is absolutely right because it would bring benefits to both the residents and the government.
People
have been arguing about
whether or not
to divert from treatment to expend a huge amount of money from health's budget for care-related education
as well
as
prevention
measures. While there are
some
strong opinions against this statement, I
still
believe that this policy has a great number of benefits for not
only
the health aspects of
people
but
also
the
governments
.

If a person is aware that
"
prevention is better than cure
"
they will protect themselves by vaccinating and doing exercise to raise their health.
Therefore
this can
help
people
decrease their disease to
some
extent and
hence
easier to treat,
especially
lightening their financial burden when they need treatment.
For example
, the
Covid 19
epidemic has shown us how
important
prevention
is,
especially
with new diseases and viruses. In the last 15 months,
nearly
5 million
people
in the world have
died
from the
Covid 19
and cost more than 16 trillion dollars worldwide.

On the other hand
, when
people
take responsibility for their health, it is not
only
for themselves
but
also
for family, society and
government
. Take Vietnam as an example, during the
Covid 19
period we have fought the epidemic
very
well in the three
first
stages until the 4th broke out again
mainly
due to the negligence and subjectivity of residents. In this time, Vietnam has had
people
infected in the community and the number of death has increased to over 21 thousand
people
. According to the Department of Financial Reporting, Vietnam lost hundreds of billion due to the
Covid 19
epidemic.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that
"
prevention is better than cure
"
is
absolutely
right
because
it would bring benefits to both the residents and the
government
.
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IELTS essay People have been arguing about whether or not to divert from treatment to expend a huge amount of money from health's budget for care-related education as well as prevention measures.

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