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what makes us who we are?”

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This is an interesting question, and there is no easy answer. We often talk about the traits we inherit from our parents, like our hair, eye color, nose shapes, our height. But all that we actually inherit from our parents are our genes and our environments, factors that then construct complete traits during development. A read an essay it comes from a book called “How DNA Makes Us Who We Are” by Robert Plomin. He argues that much of what we think of as environmental – and therefore independent of the genome – is in fact heritable. He describes a new way of thinking about the environment, as experiences that we actively select, modify and create in part on the basis of our genetic tendencies. Saadi is a famous Iranian poet, considers the harmony between inheritance and the environment to be effective in education. So, in my view, we are born with a tendency to have a specific personality or to do or like certain things. In other words, we are mix of our DNA, our environment and our education.
This is an interesting question, and there is no easy answer. We
often
talk about the traits we inherit from our parents, like our hair, eye color, nose shapes, our height.
But
all that we actually inherit from our parents are our genes and our
environments
, factors that then construct complete traits during development.

A read an essay it
comes
from a book called “How DNA
Makes
Us Who We Are” by Robert
Plomin
. He argues that much of what we
think
of as environmental
and
therefore
independent of the genome
is in fact heritable. He
describes
a new way of thinking about the
environment
, as experiences that we
actively
select, modify and create in part on the basis of our genetic tendencies.

Saadi
is a
famous
Iranian poet, considers the harmony between inheritance and the
environment
to be effective in education.

So
, in my view, we
are born
with a tendency to have a specific personality or to do or like certain things.

In other words
, we are mix of our DNA, our
environment
and our education.
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IELTS essay what makes us who we are?”

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
180 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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