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People fail in studies and are yet successful. What is the reason? What is the main reason for being successful? Give reasons and example? v.1

People fail in studies and are yet successful. What is the reason? What is the main reason for being successful? Give reasons and example? v. 1
These days, people are often exposed to negative situations that entail to put up with them. Someone deem them as necessary sacrifices, even if not comfortable; while others suppose that these events should prompt such a trigger that enables us to change our fate. I totally agree with this second view and in this essay I will suggest some food for thoughts. There are several benefits in trying to cope with unlikely situations in which we can end up. Generally speaking, living bad moments or accept unpleasant status, always negatively influences our mood, causing a lot of inner troubles. To this extent, the human being is encouraged to fight or flight from these kinds of events and then react somehow. In other words, a job that doesn't satisfy us should push us to look for something else and try to tackle with the problem. Another reason is that negative situations could be seen as starting points for reaching better ones. What I mean is that if, for example, our salary has been reduced, this might suggest that the job doesn't fit very well with our abilities and maybe could stimulate us to spiral out for something that really benefit from our skills. On the other hand, in many cases, kinds of bad events could, instead, hide advantages. As an example, a part-time job agreement could allow people to do something else, to have more leisure time or also take care of family without a baby-sitting need. In this frame a negative situation can be turned into something different. To sum up, ending up in unpleasant events could be really discouraging, but can also indicate new paths for the improvements or even suggest how to take advantage from them. I personally believe that the best attitude is to react and try to cope with negatives in order to enhance them.
These days,
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people
are
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often
exposed to
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negative
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situations
that entail to put up with them. Someone
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deem
them as necessary sacrifices, even if not comfortable; while others suppose that these
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events
should prompt such a trigger that enables us to
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change
our fate. I
totally
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agree
with this second view and in this essay I will suggest
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some
food for thoughts.

There are several benefits in trying to cope with unlikely
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situations
in which we can
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end
up.
Generally
speaking, living
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bad
moments or accept unpleasant status, always
negatively
influences our mood, causing
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a lot of
inner troubles. To this extent, the human being
is encouraged
to fight or flight from these kinds of
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events
and then react somehow.
In other words
, a job that doesn't satisfy us should push us to look for
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something
else and try to tackle with the problem.

Another reason is that
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negative
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situations
could be
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seen
as starting points for reaching better ones. What I mean is that if,
for example
, our salary has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
, this might suggest that the job doesn't fit
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very
well with our abilities and maybe could stimulate us to spiral out for
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something
that
really
benefit from our
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skills
.

On the other hand
, in
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many
cases, kinds of
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bad
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events
could,
instead
,
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hide
advantages. As an example, a part-time job agreement could
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allow
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people
to do
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something
else, to have more leisure time or
also
take care of family without a baby-sitting need. In this frame a
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negative
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situation
can
be turned
into
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something
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different
.

To sum up, ending up in unpleasant
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events
could be
really
discouraging,
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but
can
also
indicate new paths for the improvements or even suggest how to take advantage from them. I
personally
believe that the best attitude is to react and try to cope with negatives in order to enhance them.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay People fail in studies and are yet successful. What is the reason? What is the main reason for being successful? Give reasons and example? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
309 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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