Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

People buy product if it fulfill their needs, there is no need for advertisement

People buy product if it fulfill their needs, there is no need for advertisement j95ya
Individuals think that they do not need for advertisement if they need something people buy it. I am totally agree there are such things which people need but they do not know it is availability and there are something people do not need advertisement. First of all I should to say one thing, nowadays in the world every specialty is develop so that, greater number of people does not know functions if company not advertise their products people were not know novelty of phone. Here it should be noted that, in case businessman do not advertise their new products Individuals live do not modern life. Therefore sometimes people need advertisement. As for the other side of the issue, there are such products does not require advertisement. For example products used for daily needs such as bread, salt, sugar or clothes. Inhabitants not need advertisement to buy that thing humans buy bread if it fulfill their needs, or if they should purchase clothes they go in the supermarket or street market and buy like products. Not necessarily advertise for that product. If businessmen advertises evriything such their products they will bankrot. It can be concluded with all things considered, some products should be advertise another not need advertise. The advertising of any product leads to excessive spending and hassle.
Individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that they do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
if they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
something
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
it. I am
totally
Consider using a past participle here: "agreed".
agree
there are such things which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they do not know it is availability and there are something
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
I should to say one thing, nowadays in the world every specialty is
Consider using a past participle here: "developed".
develop
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that, greater number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
does not know functions if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertise
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were not know novelty of phone. Here it should
be noted
that, in case businessman do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertise
their new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
Individuals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
do not modern life.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
. As for the other side of the issue, there are such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
does not require
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
.
For example
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for daily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
such as bread, salt, sugar or clothes. Inhabitants not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
that thing humans
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
bread if it
Did you mean "fulfills"?
fulfill
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
needs
, or if they should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
clothes they go in the supermarket or street market and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
. Not
necessarily
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertise
for that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
businessmen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertises
Possible spelling mistake found.
evriything
such their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
they will
Possible spelling mistake found.
bankrot
. It can
be concluded
with all things considered,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
should be
Consider using the past participle "advertised"?
advertise
another not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
need
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertise
. The advertising of any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
leads to excessive spending and hassle.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay People buy product if it fulfill their needs, there is no need for advertisement

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
218 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts