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people are eating too much meat in Kashkadarya. what are the advantages and disadvantages?

people are eating too much meat in Kashkadarya. what are the advantages and disadvantages? PEjJJ
Meat that is purchased small markets, supermarkets and butchers as well. Everywhere people are eating meat but Kashkadarya shows us huge degree. it is benefit for them but its result is not very well. i think they cannot stop eating meat because of their ancestors. when Kashkadaryans people eating much food maybe they have outweigh or different diseases. they usually eat cows, sheep and other animals. But cows have a lot of benefit things. For example, they give them daily products and its useful for childrens and adults. In concluded, they should eat meat the same with other countries. Then they have a normal life. Because it is not good work eating a lots of meat
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meat
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Kashkadarya
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very
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they cannot
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eating
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because
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Kashkadaryans
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much food maybe they have
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different
diseases.
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they
usually
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a lot of
benefit things.
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childrens
and adults. In concluded, they should eat
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meat
the same with other countries. Then they have a normal life.
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of
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IELTS essay people are eating too much meat in Kashkadarya. what are the advantages and disadvantages?

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115 words
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