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A tremendous amount of money has been spent on space projects , some believe that its waste of money and such expenditure shall be spent on improve peoples life .

A tremendous amount of money has been spent on space projects, some believe that its waste of money and such expenditure shall be spent on improve peoples life. brwJY
It is argued by handful of people that spending paraamount money on space projects while others opt that this is a wastage of money. Rather using up money for on space projects, expenditures shall be spent to uplift people's life. In my opinion money should be spent on improving peoples lives reasons will be discuss in the upcoming paragraph. To commence, why it is benefical to invest in space projects. Since government begin to invest their fund in space exploration over the past years many experiments and researches has been done by scientists and they try to find another place to live other than earth. A vast range of fund has been spent on manufacturing equipments like shuttles, rockets and crafts which needs to operate their experiments. Just to test these equipments they spent a lot money on them. Hence, it consume huge part of authorities fund. Beside this, a scientists wants to know about way of living on other planet. It is said by researchers that there is water present on the planet mars. Eventhough there is no evident shown by them which shows that on planet mars water is present. On the other hand, instead of spending expenditure on searching new place for living, these money can be spent on uplifting individuals life. African countries are most in need as there is lack of avalibility of water. Moreover, a lot people face obstacles during world war and still suferring. so, government should spent money on improving and helping these civilians. Therefore if earths condition remain stable and improved, no need of searching new place. In addition it can be seen that almost everything is available on planet earth whereas no proof is shown wheather leftover planets have these things or not. It can be conclued although space exploration provide us solar system and many useful things still improving people life is more important.
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is argued
by handful of
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people
that spending
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paraamount
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money
on
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space
projects while others opt that this is a wastage of money.

Rather
using up
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money
for on
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space
projects, expenditures shall be
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spent
to uplift
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people
's life. In my opinion
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money
should be
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spent
on improving
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peoples
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lives
reasons will be
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discuss
in the upcoming paragraph. To commence, why it is
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benefical
to invest in
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space
projects. Since
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government
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begin
to invest their fund in
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space
exploration over the past years
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many
experiments and researches has
been done
by
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scientists and
they try to find another place to
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live
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other
than earth. A vast range of fund has been
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spent
on manufacturing equipments like shuttles, rockets and crafts which needs to operate their experiments.
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Just
to
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test
these equipments they
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spent
a lot
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money
on them.
Hence
, it
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consume
huge part of authorities fund. Beside this, a scientists wants to know about way of living on
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other
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planet
. It
is said
by researchers that there is water present on the
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planet
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mars
.
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Eventhough
there is no evident shown by them which
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shows
that on
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planet
The planet and the god are written with uppercase. 'mars' refers to the verb 'mar' meaning to spoil, or the plural of the noun 'mar' meaning blemishes.
mars
water is present.

On the
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other
hand,
instead
of spending expenditure on searching new place for living, these
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money
can be
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spent
on uplifting
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individuals
life. African countries are most in need as there is lack of
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avalibility
of water.
Moreover
, a lot
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people
face obstacles during world war and
still
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suferring
.
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so
,
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government
should
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spent
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money
on improving and helping these civilians.
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Therefore
if earths condition remain stable and
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improved
, no need of searching new place. In
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addition it
can be
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seen
that almost everything is available on
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planet
earth whereas no proof
is shown
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wheather
leftover
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planets
have these things or not.

It can be
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conclued
although
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space
exploration provide us solar system and
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many
useful things
still
improving
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people
life is more
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important
.
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IELTS essay A tremendous amount of money has been spent on space projects, some believe that its waste of money and such expenditure shall be spent on improve peoples life.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
5.5
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