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PARENTS ARE THE BEST TEACHERS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

In these days the role of parents not only in family but also in society are the most important because of educate to their children. However i completely disagree with the idea that this is a insufficient way to teach children. On the one hand there are several reasons why parents are the best teachers. Firstly the most significant knowledge for child's early life is to given by their parents. Secondly this method is great beneficial for children if their parents are unemployed and when they occupied with child's education. Finally if children have a heavy illness and for this reason they have no ability to walk, to watch, to speak or such sickness even if their parents are busy with their work they obliged to engaged in child's life. For instance a recent study found that in the whole world parents who instruct their children are nearly 27% but parents who prefer educate their children in kindergarten, school or college are around 71% and other parents consider that this is a ineffectual way to teach children. On the other hand the main disappointment of this situation is parents are tremendous work pressure and they have no time to instructed their children. Because of longer working hours their financial side are good for their lives but no child's life. It is true that they able to fulfill the wishes of their children, providing them with the latest technology while they have no time to control them. In addition in single parent families a mother or a father have to hard work for child's future and he or she prefer to engage teacher for their children. In developing countries such as China, USA, Russia the rich people in that country or any other countries are hire an excellent teacher for educate their children an example. In conclusion my view is that parents are not good a teacher and it is wrong to they have no extra time to teach their children.
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On the one hand there are several reasons why
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parents
are the best
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teachers
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Firstly
the most significant knowledge for
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child's
early life is to
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given
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parents
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Secondly
this method is great beneficial for
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children
if their
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parents
are unemployed
and when they occupied with
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child's
education.
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if
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children
have a heavy illness and
for this reason
they have no ability to walk, to
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watch
, to speak or such sickness even if their
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parents
are busy with their work they obliged to engaged in
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child's
life.
For instance
a recent study found that in the whole world
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parents
who instruct their
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children
are
nearly
27%
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parents
who prefer educate their
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children
in kindergarten, school or college are around 71% and other
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parents
consider that this is
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a
ineffectual way to teach children.

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the main disappointment of this situation is
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parents
are tremendous work
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pressure and
they have no time to instructed their
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children
.
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of longer working hours their financial side are
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lives
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life. It is true that
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able to fulfill the wishes of their
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, providing them with the latest technology while they have no time to control them. In
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families a mother or a father
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. In
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developing countries
such as China, USA, Russia the rich
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in that country or any other countries are hire an excellent
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for educate their
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an example.

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conclusion my view is that
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teacher and
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IELTS essay PARENTS ARE THE BEST TEACHERS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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