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Paragraph describing hair

Paragraph describing hair 537pQ

Her mother’s hair is cut to shoulder width and held in place with a light blue headband. Her mother’s hair is coarse and hard due to hard labor all year round. Her mother’s hair has become grayed over time, which has passed so quickly or due to the worries and sorrows her mother faced in life. Although my mother’s hair is not long, sleek, not black, shiny, not floating like other people, but that hair makes me admire and love my mother – a mother who always ends heart for family.

Her You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmomparent
mother’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwighairstylegrassfurhaircutfiber
hair
 is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 to shoulder width and held in place with a light blue headband. Her You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmomparent
mother’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwighairstylegrassfurhaircutfiber
hair
 is coarse and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 due to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 labor all year round. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmomparent
mother’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwighairstylegrassfurhaircutfiber
hair
 has become grayed over time, which has passed This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
quickly
 or due to the worries and sorrows her You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmomparent
mother
 faced in life. Although my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmomparent
mother’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwighairstylegrassfurhaircutfiber
hair
 is not long, sleek, not black, shiny, not floating like other This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwighairstylegrassfurhaircutfiber
hair
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
 me admire and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmomparent
mother
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
–
 a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withmomparent
mother
 who always ends heart for family. 