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Overpopulqtion is the most serious environmental problem. To what extend do you agree?

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The world is facing numerous problems nowadays and the biggest is overpopulation. The overpopulation itself is not damaging. The lifestyle of the society is what causes major environmental problems. In this essay I am going to express my poimt of view about this topic. Firstly, with the increase of the population our resources are reducing. We are using all our natural resources as gas and fuel. At this point we might not have enough resources to fulfill our needs in the future. Moreover, people are misusing what nature has offered us for century. Deforestation is an example. Not to mention the pollution caused by the irresponsibility of numerous people. We take our resources for granted. Littering for example has become do common that it does not bother us anymore. Another point to be mentioned is also the amount of car that are used. More and more people are using personal car in stand of public transportation, which lead to more environmental problems. However, all this could be avoided if we would change our lifestyle. If all of us would think twice before doing something that would damage our planet the world would be a better place. Being responsible for our own action is something that the majority of the people lack. Therefore, is impossible to change the whole world's lifestyle. To conclude I totally agree that overpopulation is the world's biggest problem. The people are the main cause of every single problem that happens, even though some are not done intentionally.
The world is facing numerous
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problems
nowadays and the biggest is overpopulation. The overpopulation itself is not damaging.
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The
lifestyle of the society is what causes major environmental
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problems
. In this essay I am going to express my
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poimt
of view about this topic.

Firstly
, with the increase of the population our resources are reducing. We are using all our natural resources as gas and fuel. At this point we might not have
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enough
resources to fulfill our needs in the future.

Moreover
,
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people
are misusing what nature has offered us for century. Deforestation is an example. Not to mention the pollution caused by the irresponsibility of numerous
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people
. We take our resources for granted. Littering
for example
has become do common that it does not bother us anymore.

Another point to
be mentioned
is
also
the amount of car that are
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used
. More and more
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people
are using personal car in stand of public transportation, which lead to more environmental problems.

However
, all this could
be avoided
if we would
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change
our lifestyle. If all of us would
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think
twice
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before
doing something that would damage our planet the world would be a better place. Being responsible for our
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own
action is something that the majority of the
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people
lack.
Therefore
, is impossible to
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change
the whole world's lifestyle.

To conclude
I
totally
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agree
that overpopulation is the world's biggest
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problem
. The
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people
are the main cause of every single
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problem
that happens,
even though
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some
are not done
intentionally
.

IELTS essay Overpopulqtion is the most serious environmental problem.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
251 words
6.0
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