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Overfishing has resulted in a dramatic drop in the quantity of fish in our oceans over the last century and is a threat to the well-being of people around the world. Identify possible reasons for this problem suggest measures that could be taken to solve it.

Overfishing has resulted in a dramatic drop in the quantity of fish in our oceans over the last century and is a threat to the well-being of people around the world. Identify possible reasons for this problem suggest measures that could be taken to solve it. yxbMd
Overfishing is an occurrence that has led, through the last hundred of years, to a sensible reduction of fish’s species all over the seas and moreover it has become a health issue. There are many possible reasons causing this problem but it is clear we should find a solution. I strongly believe the main point about economy. By this I mean that today we have a great number of people who work in order to maintain the huge chain made of big boats, infrastructure, fish markets. It is acceptable to argue that there is the law of supply and demand, so they simply satisfy a need, but I believe it is strongly a matter of money, if they started to fish less, prices would grow, and maybe some people cannot afford it anymore, and the earnes would go down. Anyway a solution is required, because overfishing mines the biological equilibrium between species in the seas, hence this involving the human being, too. I would suggest two kinds of approach. The first one is to strictly rule the quantity of fish that every nation can fish. This should provide a tax for everyone who does not respect the laws, and could allow a period of not fishing, in which fish can reproduce. Secondly I believe that being conscious of the issue is the first step to solve it, then people should be informed about that and maybe should start to act consequently, maybe eating less fish. Concluding I really guess that addressing the issue is an urgent question, involving all the parts and finding solutions who can take into consideration the reasons of both sides: who want to make money or simply earn a wage for their sustenance; and the needs of a nature that is our home and require great respect and care. But in order to do that, our behaviour is pivotal.
Overfishing is an occurrence that has led, through the last hundred of years, to a sensible reduction of fish’s species all over the seas and
moreover
it has become a health issue.

There are
many
possible reasons causing this problem
but
it is
clear
we should find a solution.

I
strongly
believe the main point about economy.

By this I mean that
today
we have a great number of
people
who work in order to maintain the huge chain made of
big
boats, infrastructure, fish markets.

It is acceptable to argue that there is the law of supply and demand,
so
they
simply
satisfy a need,
but
I believe it is
strongly
a matter of money, if they
started
to fish less, prices would grow, and maybe
some
people
cannot afford it anymore, and the
earnes
would go down.

Anyway a solution
is required
,
because
overfishing mines the biological equilibrium between species in the seas,
hence
this involving the human being, too.

I would suggest two kinds of approach.

The
first
one is to
strictly
rule
the quantity of fish that every nation can fish.

This should provide a tax for everyone who does not respect the laws, and could
allow
a period of not fishing, in which fish can reproduce.

Secondly
I believe that being conscious of the issue is the
first
step to solve it, then
people
should
be informed
about that and maybe should
start
to act
consequently
, maybe eating
less
fish.

Concluding I
really
guess that addressing the issue is an urgent question, involving all the parts and finding solutions who can take into consideration the reasons of both sides:

who
want
to
make
money or
simply
earn a wage for their sustenance; and the needs of a nature
that is
our home and require great respect and care.

But
in order to do that, our
behaviour
is pivotal.
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IELTS essay Overfishing has resulted in a dramatic drop in the quantity of fish in our oceans over the last century and is a threat to the well-being of people around the world. Identify possible reasons for this problem suggest measures that could be taken to solve it.

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313 words
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