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Write about the following topic. Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Family is the core of any healthy society. A strong relationship between children and their parents is fundamental for helping the offspring to face life challenges. In my opinion, parents could play a vital role in supporting their children to be successful citizens. Parent personal experience transmission and their family warmth would hugely affect adult children's future consequences. Firstly, parents have lots of life experiences which could boost their youngsters' achievements. For example, family communication between parents and their sons and daughters could convey many real-life experiences. Therefore, keeping a double-way conversation could save the new generation tons of time. Therefore, good communication between parents and children would be enormous sustenance from parents to their children. Secondly, today's world's active lifestyle keeps working people busy all the time. The parents could have a potential role in bettering their adult children's life. For instance, parents could help their adult children raise their children. Moreover, parents could invite their daughters and sons for healthy food meals. The warmth yielded from that kind of ties is energetic to the adult children and grandchildren. Consequently, young adults would be more productive in their lives, which could be another way of having a crucial part in young adults' advancement. In conclusion, the family is the primary unit of any community. And having strong ties between generations could be a tremendous progression. In my opinion, parents could play an essential role in their children. Improving children's experiences through good communication and sending messages of love to their grandchildren would enormously affect the new generations' lives.
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is the core of any healthy society. A strong relationship between
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children
and their
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parents
is fundamental for helping the offspring to face life challenges. In my opinion,
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parents
could play a vital role in supporting their
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children
to be successful citizens.
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Parent
personal
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experience
transmission and their
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family
warmth would
hugely
affect adult children's future consequences.

Firstly
,
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parents
have lots of life
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experiences
which could boost their youngsters' achievements.
For example
,
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family
communication between
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parents
and their sons and daughters could convey
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many
real-life
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experiences
.
Therefore
, keeping a double-way conversation could save the new generation tons of time.
Therefore
,
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good
communication between
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parents
and
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children
would be enormous sustenance from
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parents
to their children.

Secondly
,
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today
's world's active lifestyle
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keeps
working
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people
busy all the time. The
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parents
could have a potential role in bettering their adult children's life.
For instance
,
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parents
could
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help
their adult
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children
raise their
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children
.
Moreover
,
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parents
could invite their daughters and sons for healthy food meals. The warmth yielded from that kind of ties is energetic to the adult
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children
and grandchildren.
Consequently
, young
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adults
would be more productive in their
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lives
, which could be another way of having a crucial part in young adults' advancement.

In conclusion
, the
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family
is the primary unit of any community. And having strong ties between generations could be a tremendous progression. In my opinion,
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parents
could play an essential role in their
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children
. Improving children's
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experiences
through
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good
communication and sending messages of
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love
to their grandchildren would
enormously
affect the new generations'
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lives
.
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IELTS essay Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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