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Over the years, we all accumulate objects of sentimental value. Choose one such object and tell the tale behind its value.

Over the years, we all accumulate objects of sentimental value. Choose one such object and tell the tale behind its value. 3oYJ
My early childhood memories consists mainly of foggy, erratic images. I have a few memories from the days of my first few years. Mostly, I recollect watching television and playing games with my younger brother, who is two years my junior. There is one object, though, that has stayed with me throughout my young life, lying in my cupboard in most recent years -- my "po-chim". Back in those days, most newborn babies were given a bolster, more familiarly known to the Hokkiens as a "po-chim". My parents, being indulgent, had bought me several. Every night, they would place me in my crib and arrange my bolsters and pillows about me. They must have meant well, but for a small child, it was like being surrounded by a forest of cushions. So, I would exhaust most of my energy flinging all the paraphernalia out of my crib. . . all except for one blue-and-white bolster. Eventually, my parents got the message. At bedtime, the only bolster placed in my crib was my favorite blue-and-white "po-chim". When I finally learned to walk, I set myself to perfecting this exciting new skill. All over the house I wandered, meandering hither and thither. Nothing could stop me, be it chair, carpet, door or my parents. And, everywhere I went, so did my bolster, clutched in my hot little fist. Up hill and down dale went my bolster and I, searching for trouble and always finding it. My brother, as I have mentioned, was born when I as two years old. i knew him for my brother the firs time I set eyes on him. Marching to his crib, I plonked my bolster in it and mumbled, "Baby brother also needs 'po-chim'. " Of course, I never fully relinquished my claim to the bolster. It had been and would always be mine. My baby brother did not really seem to like it anyway. Later, as I grew older and stronger, my rough play took its toll on my "po-chim". Originally three feet long and plump with stuffing, my bolster ended up being almost empty, with one lone foot of stuffing left. The rest had long escaped through the numerous tears and splits in the material. Undeterred, I put half the stuffing in each end of the bolster and made myself a trusty ninja weapon, a nunchaku. I would whirl off in flights of fantasies, imagining myself in ninja warrior, ever ready to attack my brother, father, other, or anyone else for that matter. Most children grow out of their soft toys and bolsters at any early age. I kept my old bolster by my bedside long past the age of ten. I never stopped playing with it, either. The games just got more sophisticated. Once, I built a miniature obstacle course using my bolster as a cable car sorts. Then, one day, the material just got too soft to be used nay more. I could poke my finger through it without exerting pressure. That night, I placed my bolster in my cupboard and went to sleep, a sad little boy. For the next few weeks, sleepless night after sleepless night followed. Finally, I gave in and started using the old bolster again. Patching up the hole as best as I could, I returned the old bolster to my bedside. It did not take long before it happened. One night, unable to handle the job any more, my bolster tore in half. It was a heartbroken and sorry boy who sewed up the tear one last time. Since then, my bolster has lain in a shrine of its own in my cupboard. I still take the occasional glance at it. It no longer represents pleasant dreams at night for my "grown-up" self. But it does represent something more intangible That bolster, lying there, had been my first friend, my faithful comforter. It represents my childhood.
My early childhood memories consists
mainly
of foggy, erratic images. I have a few memories from the days of my
first
few years.
Mostly
, I recollect watching television and playing games with my younger
brother
, who is two years my junior. There is one object, though, that has stayed with me throughout my young life, lying in my cupboard in most recent years -- my
"
po-chim
"
.

Back in those days, most newborn babies were
given
a
bolster
, more
familiarly
known to the
Hokkiens
as a
"
po-chim
"
. My parents, being indulgent, had
bought
me several. Every
night
, they would place me in my
crib
and arrange my
bolsters
and pillows about me. They
must
have meant well,
but
for a
small
child, it was like
being surrounded
by a forest of cushions.
So
, I would exhaust most of my energy flinging all the paraphernalia out of my
crib
.
.
.
all
except for
one blue-and-white bolster.

Eventually
, my parents
got
the message. At bedtime, the
only
bolster
placed in my
crib
was my favorite blue-and-white
"
po-chim
"
.

When I
finally
learned to walk, I set myself to perfecting this exciting new
skill
. All over the
house
I wandered, meandering hither and thither. Nothing could
stop
me, be it chair, carpet, door or my parents. And, everywhere I went,
so
did my
bolster
, clutched in my hot
little
fist. Up hill and down dale went my
bolster
and I, searching for trouble and always finding it.

My
brother
, as I have mentioned,
was born
when I as two years
old
.
i
knew him for my
brother
the firs time I set eyes on him. Marching to his
crib
, I plonked my
bolster
in it and mumbled,
"
Baby
brother
also
needs '
po-chim
'.
"
Of course
, I never
fully
relinquished my claim to the
bolster
. It had been and would always be mine. My baby
brother
did not
really
seem to like it anyway.

Later, as I grew older and stronger, my rough play took its toll on my
"
po-chim
"
.
Originally
three feet
long
and plump with stuffing, my
bolster
ended up being almost empty, with one lone foot of stuffing
left
. The rest had
long
escaped through the numerous tears and splits in the material. Undeterred, I put half the stuffing in each
end
of the
bolster
and made myself a trusty ninja weapon, a
nunchaku
. I would whirl off in flights of fantasies, imagining myself in ninja warrior, ever ready to attack my
brother
, father, other, or anyone else for that matter.

Most children grow out of their soft toys and
bolsters
at any early age. I
kept
my
old
bolster
by my bedside
long
past the age of ten. I never
stopped
playing with it, either. The games
just
got
more sophisticated. Once, I built a miniature obstacle course using my
bolster
as a cable car sorts.

Then, one day, the material
just
got
too soft to be
used
nay more. I could poke my finger through it without exerting pressure. That
night
, I placed my
bolster
in my cupboard and went to sleep, a sad
little
boy.

For the
next
few weeks, sleepless
night
after sleepless
night
followed.
Finally
, I gave in and
started
using the
old
bolster
again. Patching up the hole as
best
as I could, I returned the
old
bolster
to my bedside.

It did not take
long
before
it happened. One
night
, unable to handle the job
any more
, my
bolster
tore in half. It was a heartbroken and sorry boy who sewed up the tear one last time.

Since then, my
bolster
has lain in a shrine of its
own
in my cupboard. I
still
take the occasional glance at it. It no longer represents pleasant dreams at
night
for my
"
grown-up
"
self.
But
it does represent something more intangible

That
bolster
, lying there, had been my
first
friend, my faithful comforter. It represents my childhood.
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IELTS essay Over the years, we all accumulate objects of sentimental value. Choose one such object and tell the tale behind its value.

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