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OUR LIFESTYLES ARE LESS HEALTHY THAN OUR GRANDPARENTS

OUR LIFESTYLES ARE LESS HEALTHY THAN OUR GRANDPARENTS mXP9K
People are always arguing about if we live as we should today, or was easier and healthier for our grandparents. Obviously, it is known that there is a big difference between these two ages; however, it is simple to identify that life was better lived in the past. For example, the technological advances gives us a lot of advantages but not using it in a responsible and a health way make us adopt bad habits, we waste most of our time in front of our mobile phones and computers that we begin to live sedentary.
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live
as we should
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today
, or was easier and healthier for our grandparents.
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big
difference between these two ages;
however
, it is simple to identify that life was better
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lived
in the past.

For example
, the technological advances gives us
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a lot of
advantages
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but
not using it in a responsible and a health way
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make
us adopt
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bad
habits, we waste most of our time in front of our mobile phones and computers that we
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begin
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IELTS essay OUR LIFESTYLES ARE LESS HEALTHY THAN OUR GRANDPARENTS

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  American English
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95 words
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