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ou should spend about 45 minutes on this task. Write a 4-paragraph one-sided opinion essay for the following topic: Some people think that the best way to teach their children is to compare them with their older generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give any relevant example if necessary. You should write at least 250 words.

ou should spend about 45 minutes on this task. Write a 4-paragraph one-sided opinion essay for the following topic: Some people think that the best way to teach their children is to compare them with their older generations. Give any relevant example if necessary. RRjoP
It is believed that compare children with their older generations is the best way to teach them. In my own way of thinking, I disagree with this statement which is going to be discussed in the following paragraphs. Undoubtedly, childern is the future not only of a nation, but the world also and they must be access to advance education for their future. Firstly, as the world has changed every day, a child should be grown up as they want, they have rights to improve themselves their own way. Younger generations have different thinking and acting different from the olders, they willing to take chances or risks to reach a higher level in their life. While older generations want to be safe and do not want to take a risks due to their critical thinking. They tend to choose safety direction for their childern and make them follow what they want them to be. Secondly, should we compare our children to older generations, we will prevent their promotion and destroy their future. Because they are easily get stress from their parents those who from older generations, they cannot improve themselves and only a robot which obey the demand from parents. For instance, children in a family that parents do not control or make them have to choose the path their parents want, they are supported and believed from parents always success in life. Dedicating themselves for the nations and the world, they can have a positive impact on their next generations. However, children were compared to older generations normally will become scared, do not have their own words in life, always depend on someone or parents. Failure is the thing that inevitable, they have no idea what waiting for them in the future if parents still compare them with other people. In conclusion, comparing childern to older generations is what we need to avoid, children must to develop in their own way, they need someone teach them how to become a good person for their future not how to similar to someone else.
It
is believed
that compare
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children
with their
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older
generations is the best way to teach them. In my
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own
way of thinking, I disagree with this statement which is going to
be discussed
in the following paragraphs.

Undoubtedly
,
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childern
is the
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future
not
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only
of a nation,
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but
the world
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
also and
they
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must
be access to advance education for their
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future
.
Firstly
, as the world has
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changed
every day, a child should
be grown
up as they
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want
, they have rights to
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improve
themselves their
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own
way. Younger generations have
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different
thinking and acting
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different
from the
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olders
,
Did you mean "they're willing", "they are willing", or "they were willing"?
they willing
to take chances or
The verb 'risks' is used with the gerund form: "risks reaching".
risks to reach
a higher level in their life. While
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older
generations
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want
to be safe and do not
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want
to take a
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risks
due to their critical thinking. They tend to choose safety direction for their
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childern
and
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make
them follow what they
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want
them to be.

Secondly
, should we compare our
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children
to
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older
generations, we will
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prevent
their promotion and
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destroy
their
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future
.
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Because
they are
easily
Consider using a past participle here: "got", "gotten".
get
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stress
from their
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parents
those who from
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older
generations, they cannot
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improve
themselves and
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only
a robot which obey the demand from
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parents
.
For instance
,
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children
in a family that
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parents
do not control or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them
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have to
choose the path their
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parents
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want
, they
are supported
and believed from
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parents
always success in life. Dedicating themselves for the nations and the world, they can have a
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positive
impact on their
next
generations.
However
,
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children
were compared
to
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older
generations
normally
will become scared, do not have their
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own
words in life, always depend on someone or
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parents
. Failure is the thing that inevitable, they have no
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idea
what waiting for them in the
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future
if
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parents
still
compare them with other
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people
.

In conclusion
, comparing
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childern
to
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older
generations is what we need to avoid,
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children
After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use "must" or "have to" here.
must to
develop in their
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own
way, they need someone
The pronoun 'someone' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "teaches", "taught".
teach
them how to become a
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good
person for their
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future
not how
Did you mean "too similar to"?
to similar to
someone else.
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IELTS essay ou should spend about 45 minutes on this task. Write a 4-paragraph one-sided opinion essay for the following topic: Some people think that the best way to teach their children is to compare them with their older generations. Give any relevant example if necessary.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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