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This was a terrible day in my life

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This morning I was in shock and I was wondering why this happened to me. The person I love the most - my grandfather passed away. He died of a stroke and in the very garden, we used to tend to. I fell into despair despite my parents' constant comfort: "My dear, may you take comfort in knowing he is watching over you". By then I had settled down a bit and hugged him one last time. Then there were many other rituals and I like a passive robot followed. That afternoon, I locked myself in my room and cried a lot, and missed the memories between me and my grandfather. I wish he was alive and smiling at me like always. And the supplications will soon be forgotten by me.
This morning I was in
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shock and
I was wondering why this happened to me. The person I
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love
the most
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my grandfather passed away. He
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died
of a stroke and in the
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very
garden, we
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used
to tend to. I fell into despair despite my parents' constant comfort:
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"
My dear, may you take comfort in knowing he is watching over you
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"
. By then I had settled down a bit and hugged him one last time. Then there were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other rituals and I like a passive robot followed. That afternoon, I locked myself in my room and cried a lot, and missed the memories between me and my grandfather. I wish he was alive and smiling at me like always. And the supplications will
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soon
be forgotten
by me.
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IELTS essay This was a terrible day in my life

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
131 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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