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Organized the tour to remote areas Is it positive or negative to local people and environment

Organized the tour to remote areas Is it positive or negative to local people and environment GwyKe
Nowadays, the tourist tend to created the tour visiting to distanct areas which is really far from the city. So organized the journey to remote areas is both postitive and negative development with the local people and the environment. The essay below will be shown. In the positive side, although it bring not much benefits, but I strongly believe that it will help the local people life be better. Firstly, the local residents will have more opputinities to develop the business and generate the economic value. For instance, because of the increasing visitors so the local residents are able to sell souvenirs such as handicrafts or postcards. So the stable income of that resident is increasingly. However, this development brings the economic benefits to local people but it still have some potential impacts to them, especially with environment. Because of the accommodation demand of people nowadays is really high, so it hard for them to live or stay without good facilities, especially with the infrastructure. To satisfy that demand, we need some hotel and road construction. Well, that is a serious threats to the species habitat, they will loss their house and the environment at there is also affected. To sum up, the increase of tourist to the remote areas help to improve the regional people life, but it threats to the environment lead to imbalance the ecosysterm
Nowadays, the tourist tend
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the tour visiting to
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distanct
areas which is
really
far from the city.
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organized the journey to remote areas is both
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postitive
and
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negative
development with the
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local
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people
and the
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environment
. The essay below will
be shown
.

In the
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positive
side, although it
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bring
not
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much
benefits,
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strongly
believe that it will
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help
the
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local
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people
life be better.
Firstly
, the
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local
residents will have more
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opputinities
to develop the business and generate the economic value.
For instance
,
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because
of the increasing visitors
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so
the
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local
residents are able to sell souvenirs such as handicrafts or postcards.
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So
the stable income of that resident is
increasingly
.

However
, this development brings the economic benefits to
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local
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people
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but
it
still
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have
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some
potential impacts to them,
especially
with
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environment
.
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Because
of the accommodation demand of
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people
nowadays is
really
high,
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so
it
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hard
for them to
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live
or stay without
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good
facilities,
especially
with the infrastructure. To satisfy that demand, we need
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some
hotel and road construction. Well,
that is
a serious
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threats
to the species habitat, they will
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loss
their
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house
and the
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environment
at there is
also
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affected
.

To sum up, the increase of tourist to the remote areas
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help
to
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improve
the regional
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people
life,
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but
it threats to the
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environment
lead to imbalance the
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ecosysterm
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IELTS essay Organized the tour to remote areas Is it positive or negative to local people and environment

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
227 words
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