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online shops to close offline stores

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It is seen that online stores have tremendously increased and have attributed the fact of closing the shops in the cities. I strongly agree with the rise in online websites and the impact creating on offline sales. In this essay, we will discuss the factors contributing for the reduction in the store purchases. Firstly, online shopping is a boom to everyone, as it saves a lot of time and money. One individual does not need to drive to the store and select their apparel where we can find it within our finger tips, furthermore, we can compare the prices on each shopping app choosing a best affordable price for the product. It becomes a hassle when comes to offline, looking for stores and comparing prices consumes more time and energy. For a good illustration, a dress can be compared online from any stores over all the country and purchase it at the best discounted price. In addition, websites provide a huge discount as there is no intermediaries on the online platform, which includes the direct purchase from a seller to the purchaser moreover, the latest products are being released only on online websites which may not be available in the shops. For instance, the mobile phones launched recently are only seen on amazon website, whereas the offline dealers get them after few days. Thus to conclude, increasing population as more attracted to the online shopping which is leading to the downfall of stores and shops in the cities.
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strongly
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with the rise in
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online
websites and the impact creating on offline sales. In this essay, we will discuss the factors contributing for the reduction in the
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store
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purchases
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,
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online
shopping is a boom to everyone, as it saves
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a lot of
time and money. One individual does not need to drive to the
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store
and select their apparel where we can find it within our finger tips,
furthermore
, we can compare the prices on each shopping app choosing
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a
best affordable price for the product. It becomes a hassle when
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comes
to offline, looking for
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stores
and comparing prices consumes more time and energy. For a
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good
illustration, a dress can
be compared
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online
from any
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stores
over all the country and
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purchase
it at the best discounted price.

In addition
, websites provide a huge discount as there is no intermediaries on the
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online
platform, which includes the direct
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purchase
from a seller to the purchaser
moreover
, the latest products are
being released
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only
on
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online
websites which may not be available in the shops.
For instance
, the mobile phones launched recently are
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only
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seen
on
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amazon
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website
, whereas the offline dealers
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get
them after few days.

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to conclude
, increasing population as more attracted to the
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shopping which is leading to the downfall of
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and shops in the cities.
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IELTS essay online shops to close offline stores

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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