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Online shopping has become more common

Online shopping has become more common K3oG9

In the era of developing technology, online shopping has become more common in recent years. In the past, people used to shop from in-store ones. In my opinion, however, it is not a positive development, and its drawbacks are outweighed. Online stores use more and more due to the advent of technology. Firstly, although these modern shops help people to save extra time, people could not make sure whether the quality of tools is at a high level or not as a result of they cannot see what they buy in a person. To illustrate, if one buys their dress from the Internet, the size, color, and shape may not fit them, so the articles, which were bought, could not be changed. Also, even sometimes, some online stores are a fraud, and their real products have far different from what are they indicate on their web. On the other hand, in the past, people used to go out shopping with their friends or family members, generally with whom they feel comfortable, which improves their cheers and happiness and this communication prevents mental problems to occur. Also, isolation has reduced throughout their shopping, and the depression, that people may face decreases due to socializing with others. Thus, over-reliance on technology and the Internet are the causes of mental problems which we have not sufficient awareness about. In conclusion, despite the various aids of the online shop, in my perspective, the negative impacts are stronger due to the lack of awareness about the products and decrease in face-to-face conversation.

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online
 shopping has become more common in recent years. In the past, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to shop from in-store ones. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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positive
 development, and its drawbacks are outweighed
. You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
Online
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use
 more and more due to the advent of technology. Firstly
, although these modern shops This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 to save extra time, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
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make
 sure whether the quality of tools is at a high level or not as a result
 of they cannot This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
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buy
 in a person. To illustrate, if one This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchases
buys
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so
 the articles, which were This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
, could not be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteredadjusted
changed
. Also
, even This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 stores are a fraud, and their real products have far This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 from what are they indicate on their web. On the other hand
, in the past, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to go out shopping with their friends or family members, generally
 with whom they feel comfortable, which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorates
improves
 their cheers and happiness and this communication This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :precludes
prevents
 mental problems to occur. Also
, isolation has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviated
reduced
 throughout their shopping, and the depression, that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 may face decreases due to socializing with others. Thus
, over-reliance on technology and the Internet are the causes of mental problems which we have not sufficient awareness about. In conclusion
, despite the various aids of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withwirednetworked
online
 shop, in my perspective, the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 impacts are stronger due to the lack of awareness about the products and decrease in face-to-face conversation. 