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Compare with the number of people who stay on island or on cruse ships

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The graph is illustrated the number of visitor who go to Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. This is line graph and there are three categories that the number of visitors stay on cruise ship, on island or Total number on the graph. Also, the unit of measurement is millions. From 2010 to 2015, rank of each line is same. Needless to say, the most number of visitor's line is total. Second is the line that visitors staying on island. The number of people spend time on island had increased since 2011 and this number kept 1. 5 millions from the late of 2012 to that of 2014. Third is the line that tourists stay on cruise ship. This graph's trend is contrast with second one. The number reached 0. 5 millions, but this number decreased in 2012. However, this line risen again and the number surpassed 1 million in 2014. From these trend, the number of people who stay on island is more than that on cruise ships until 2015. From 2015 to 2017, the rank changed between the line that visitors staying on island and that on cruise ships. the number of people stay on ships increased and reached 2 millions in 2017. However, the number of people stay on island decreased until 2016 and the number is smaller than the former but that increased again. From this, staying on the ships is more popular than staying on the island from 2015 to 2017.
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is illustrated
the
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number
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visitor
who go
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to Caribbean
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island
between 2010 and 2017. This is
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line
graph and there are three categories that the
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number
of
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visitors
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stay
on
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cruise
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ship
, on
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island
or Total
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number
on the graph.
Also
, the unit of measurement is
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millions
. From 2010 to 2015, rank of each
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line
is same. Needless to say, the most
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number
of visitor's
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line
is total. Second is the
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line
that
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visitors
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staying
on
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island
. The
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number
of
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people
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spend
time on
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island
had increased since 2011 and this
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number
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kept
1. 5
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millions
from
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the late of
2012 to that of 2014. Third is the
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line
that tourists
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stay
on
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cruise
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ship
. This graph's trend is contrast with second one. The
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number
reached 0. 5
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millions
,
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this
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number
decreased in 2012.
However
, this
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line
risen again and the
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number
surpassed 1
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million
in 2014. From these trend, the
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number
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people
who
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stay
on
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island
is more than that on
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cruise
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ships
until 2015. From 2015 to 2017, the rank
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changed
between the
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line
that
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visitors
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staying
on
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island
and that on
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cruise
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ships
.
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the
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number
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people
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stay
on
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ships
increased and reached 2
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millions
in 2017.
However
, the
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number
of
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people
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stay
on
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island
decreased until 2016 and the
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number
is smaller than the former
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that increased again. From this,
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staying
on the
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ships
is more popular than
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staying
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island
from 2015 to 2017.
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IELTS essay Compare with the number of people who stay on island or on cruse ships

Essay
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246 words
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