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One paragraph about crime and poverty

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One reason for crime is that many people are poor, which means that the quality of their lives is appalling. To put it simply, it is not important for them to consider themselves to be law abiding citizens since they have a great deal of problems. An argument in support of this is that crime is an opportunity for the poor to acquire the materials that they could not afford. Shoplifting, pickpocketing, and burglarly are cases in point. As a result, there being a positive correlation between poverty and crime, if the poverty rate is high in one society, the rate of commiting crime is high as well.
One reason for
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crime
is that
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many
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people
are poor, which means that the quality of their
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lives
is appalling. To put it
simply
, it is not
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important
for them to consider themselves to be
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law abiding
citizens since they have a great deal of problems. An argument in support of this is that
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crime
is an opportunity for the poor to acquire the materials that they could not afford. Shoplifting,
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pickpocketing
, and
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burglarly
are cases in point.
As a result
, there being a
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positive
correlation between poverty and
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crime
, if the poverty rate is high in one society, the rate of
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commiting
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crime
is high
as well
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IELTS essay One paragraph about crime and poverty

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
108 words
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