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Much of the food people eat gets transported from farms thousands of miles away

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Nowadays, majority of people eat unhealthy foods. Eating unhealthy foods influence can even be cause seriously illnesses. Despite this, it disagreed that unhealthy foods will significantly replace healthy foods. This essay will show advantages outweigh disadvantages. We can say that, majority of illnesses are being produced by eating unnatural foods. It is clear that there are many unhealthy foods like chemical foods which we can see in the markets. Eating food from farmers can reduce the number of diseases. On the other hand, young people who don't have their own profession can be a farmer. Then, they can create their own farms. In this case, several people would have their job in the farm. Furthermore, if the number of local foods rose, people would be healthier as well as they would buy a lot because of their natural tastes, cause everybody loves fresg foods. Nevertheless, in farms may has any dust, even over the products. In addition, farmers use some chemicals during the plant is growing. There may be harmful substances in plant's ingredient. Chemically grown food can easily poison customers. However, we can see the mass of products in the market. So, there can be won't be sold. In this case, farmer's money, labor will be wasted. Thus, in the beginning of planting farmers should pay a big attention. In summary, eating local foods would make people healthier. Thus, it is clear why we are going to eat local and fresh foods. It is recommended that eating fresh foods makes you healthy.
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unhealthy
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foods
.
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Eating
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unhealthy
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foods
influence can even
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be cause
seriously
illnesses. Despite this, it disagreed that
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unhealthy
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foods
will
significantly
replace healthy
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foods
. This essay will
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show
advantages outweigh disadvantages. We can say that, majority of illnesses are
being produced
by
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eating
unnatural
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foods
. It is
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clear
that there are
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many
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unhealthy
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foods
like chemical
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foods
which we can
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see
in the markets.
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Eating
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food
from
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farmers
can
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reduce
the number of diseases.
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, young
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people
who don't have their
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own
profession can be a
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farmer
. Then, they can create their
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own
farms.
In this case
, several
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people
would have their job in the farm.
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, if the number of local
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foods
rose,
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people
would be healthier
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well as they would
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buy
a lot
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of their natural tastes, cause everybody
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loves
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fresg
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foods
.
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,
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farmers
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use
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some
chemicals during the plant is growing. There may be harmful substances in plant's ingredient.
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grown
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food
can
easily
poison customers.
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, we can
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see
the mass of products in the market.
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, there can
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.
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, farmer's money, labor will
be wasted
.
Thus
, in the beginning of planting
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farmers
should pay a
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big
attention. In summary,
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eating
local
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foods
would
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make
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people
healthier.
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, it is
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clear
why we are going to eat local and fresh
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foods
. It
is recommended
that
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eating
fresh
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foods
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makes
you healthy.
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IELTS essay Much of the food people eat gets transported from farms thousands of miles away

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
253 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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