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On the other hand, my belief is that the standalone cabinet has other responsibilities too, so if Non-Government organisation, opulent families and also any volunteers could come together and fulfill the dream of nation's zero cost education. This method can be easily implemented in any society and also an adaptable one. To illustrate this, I have seen that in all the small town within USA, a mayor is being appointed to take care of human's basic needs which includes education too. Thus, I think this could be a way to help people and the government too.

On the other hand, my belief is that the standalone cabinet has other responsibilities too, so if Non-Government organisation, opulent families and also any volunteers could come together and fulfill the dream of nation's zero cost education. This method can be easily implemented in any society and also an adaptable one. To illustrate this, I have seen that in all the small town within USA, a mayor is being appointed to take care of human's basic needs which includes education too. Thus, I think this could be a way to help people and the government too. R28MQ
On the other hand, my belief is that the standalone cabinet has other responsibilities too, so if Non-Government organisation, opulent families and also any volunteers could come together and fulfill the dream of nation's zero cost education. This method can be easily implemented in any society and also an adaptable one. To illustrate this, I have seen that in all the small town within USA, a mayor is being appointed to take care of human's basic needs which includes education too. Thus, I think this could be a way to help people and the government too.
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IELTS essay On the other hand, my belief is that the standalone cabinet has other responsibilities too, so if Non-Government organisation, opulent families and also any volunteers could come together and fulfill the dream of nation's zero cost education. This method can be easily implemented in any society and also an adaptable one. To illustrate this, I have seen that in all the small town within USA, a mayor is being appointed to take care of human's basic needs which includes education too. Thus, I think this could be a way to help people and the government too.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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