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On the one hand, some people may think pay should be consumed more on human population because of the following reasons.

On the one hand, some people may think pay should be consumed more on human population because of the following reasons. b3b0Q
In the contemporary world, some groups believe that plenty of cash and efforts are spent on preserving wild animals, others think that this huge amount of fund should be used to human activity. While this suggestion seems to be reasonable, I firmly disagree with this statement. On the one hand, some people may think pay should be consumed more on human population because of the following reasons. Talking about the first reason, over the past decades, the population of the earth is rapidly rising, however, the resources in the world are limited, so people who have to suffer from lack of salary is at an increasing rate and this amount of property can assist them in many aspects of the soul. For example, each year, millions of people do not have a happy growth due to their financial problems. Moreover, this group wants to spend more capital on human since they might want to have a better heart quality, they may do not the see the benefits of protecting animals, they just need to have more skyscrapers and shopping malls in their cities. On the other hand, I strongly disagree with that view for a number of grounds. Firstly, look after wild animals not only brings a variety of advantages to the wildlife, but also the atmosphere, animals support the atmosphere in stopping the climate changes which can prevent the earth from many serious disasters such as drought or melting ice. For instance, beavers regulation of waterways can save the earth from floods and forest fires. Secondly, i do not support this view because in the recent decades, the quality of wildlife is considerably decreasing due to human, so now, they need to have the responsibilities to bring animals home back, if people keep exploiting and do not have any activities which can bring animals certain assistiances then one day, in the near future, they will revenge. For example, people profit millions of dollars from wildlife each year. In conclusion, many people want to concentrate on giving wild animal protections meanwhile others consider that human heart is a more important factor. In my view, I think that this enormous amount of payment should be invested in animal preservation than human population.
In the contemporary world,
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some
groups believe that
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plenty
of cash and efforts
are spent
on preserving wild
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animals
, others
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think
that this huge amount of fund should be
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used
to
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human
activity. While this suggestion seems to be reasonable, I
firmly
disagree with this statement.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
may
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think
pay should
be consumed
more on
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human
population
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because
of the following reasons. Talking about the
first
reason, over the past decades, the population of the earth is
rapidly
rising,
however
, the resources in the world
are limited
,
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so
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people
who
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have to
suffer from lack of salary is at an increasing rate and this amount of property can assist them in
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many
aspects of the soul.
For example
, each year, millions of
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people
do not have a happy growth due to their financial problems.
Moreover
, this group wants to spend more capital on
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human
since they might want to have a better heart quality, they may do not the
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see
the benefits of protecting
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animals
, they
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just
need to have more skyscrapers and shopping malls in their cities.

On the other hand
, I
strongly
disagree with that view for a number of grounds.
Firstly
, look after wild
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animals
not
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only
brings a variety of advantages to the wildlife,
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but
also
the atmosphere,
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animals
support the atmosphere in stopping the climate
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changes
which can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the earth from
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many
serious disasters such as drought or melting ice.
For instance
, beavers regulation of waterways can save the earth from floods and forest fires.
Secondly
,
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i
do not support this view
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because
in the recent decades, the quality of wildlife is
considerably
decreasing due to
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human
,
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so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, they need to have the responsibilities to bring
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animals
home back, if
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
exploiting and do not have any activities which can bring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
certain
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assistiances
then one day, in the near future, they will revenge.
For example
,
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people
profit millions of dollars from wildlife each year.

In conclusion
,
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many
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people
want to concentrate on giving wild
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
protections meanwhile others consider that
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human
heart is a more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
factor. In my view, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that this enormous amount of payment should
be invested
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
preservation than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
population.
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IELTS essay On the one hand, some people may think pay should be consumed more on human population because of the following reasons.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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