Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

On the one hand, competitiveness is considered as a springboard for self-improvement. Obviously, people having a high opinion towards others’ achievements tend to become as gifted as them. Consequently, they have a lot of effort to pursue and achieve their own targets. In addition, collective improvement can be made by this component. Class environment is a clear example. Only when almost students in a class try to be not inferior to others can classmates can co-study and co-develop themselves. On the

On the one hand, competitiveness is considered as a springboard for self-improvement. Obviously, people having a high opinion towards others’ achievements tend to become as gifted as them. Consequently, they have a lot of effort to pursue and achieve their own targets. In addition, collective improvement can be made by this component. Class environment is a clear example. Only when almost students in a class try to be not inferior to others can classmates can co-study and co-develop themselves. On the Vw5pD
In the light of constant requirements for qualified and committed workers, competitiveness has progressively emerged. Many people hold a strong belief that it is a positive characteristic. While this point of view is valuable to a certain extent, I partly disagree with it. On the one hand, competitiveness is considered as a springboard for self-improvement. Obviously, people having a high opinion towards others’ achievements tend to become as gifted as them. Consequently, they have a lot of effort to pursue and achieve their own targets. In addition, collective improvement can be made by this component. Class environment is a clear example. Only when almost students in a class try to be not inferior to others can classmates can co-study and co-develop themselves. On the other hand, people who are competitive have to deal with serious pressure. On the ground that they want what they do always perfect, they put themselves under too much strain and keep continuously worried. Besides, over-competitiveness easily create jealousy and, of course, hatred. People with these behaviors are willing to do anything to overcome their peers or colleagues, which is nearly counter-productive. Moreover, having seriously competitive individuals work together may lead to conflictions as they all expect that their perceptions is more prevalent. In conclusion, it’s a great help of competitiveness in perfecting ourselves and boasting collective development, it is necessary to evaluate the value of this behavior in terms of other aspects, especially in how much strain it causes and how it makes an influence on co-operative relationships.
In the light of constant requirements for qualified and committed workers, competitiveness has
progressively
emerged.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
hold a strong belief that it is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
characteristic. While this point of view is valuable to a certain extent, I partly disagree with it.

On the one hand, competitiveness
is considered
as a springboard for self-improvement.
Obviously
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
having a high opinion towards others’ achievements tend to become as gifted as them.
Consequently
, they have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
effort to pursue and achieve their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
targets.
In addition
, collective improvement can
be made
by this component.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Class
environment is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
example.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Only
when almost students in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
try to be not inferior to others can classmates can co-study and co-develop themselves.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who are competitive
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
deal with serious pressure. On the ground that they want what they do always perfect, they put themselves under too much strain and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
continuously
worried.
Besides
, over-competitiveness
easily
create jealousy and,
of course
, hatred.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
with these behaviors are willing to do anything to overcome their peers or colleagues, which is
nearly
counter-productive.
Moreover
, having
seriously
competitive individuals work together may lead to
Possible spelling mistake found.
conflictions
as they all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
that their perceptions is more prevalent.

In conclusion
, it’s a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of competitiveness in perfecting ourselves and boasting collective development, it is necessary to evaluate the value of this behavior in terms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
aspects,
especially
in how much strain it causes and how it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
an influence on co-operative relationships.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay On the one hand, competitiveness is considered as a springboard for self-improvement. Obviously, people having a high opinion towards others’ achievements tend to become as gifted as them. Consequently, they have a lot of effort to pursue and achieve their own targets. In addition, collective improvement can be made by this component. Class environment is a clear example. Only when almost students in a class try to be not inferior to others can classmates can co-study and co-develop themselves. On the

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6.5band
    A large number of students after graduating have difficulty in finding an occupation
    A large number of students after graduating have difficulty in finding an occupation. As a result, they cannot afford necessary needs in their life which is a serious problem with society. In this essay, the writer will explain about two main reasons that made bachelors take part in a company harder...
  • 5.5band
    TOPIC: HOW IS THE IMPORTANCE OF HR IN A COMPANY. PLEASE SPECIFIC INFORMATION, NO GENERAL.
    In modern life, there is rising a lot of organization which will have a certain contribution to the economic development of a country. And to be a successful company, a business can not build a perfect team with professional staff and quality without a master HR team. To begin with, HR stands for Hu...
  • 6.5band
    Agree /disagree. Some people believe that
    Global athletic events such as the Olympics, the World Cup, the Extreme Games and even the American Super Bowl are incredible opportunities for countries. These iconic spectacles can provide a country with an economic avalanche of benefits or expose it to a public relations disaster. This essay will...
  • 5band
    The average expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010
    It can be explicitly seen that in Japan, the average household expenditure was ammounted for 21%; whereas the expenditure in Malaysia was more than in the Japan with a major difference of 13%. On the other hand, Japan had been spend its 20% of expenditure on transport where, only 10% expenditure was...
  • 6band
    Cybercrime and how not to be its victim
    Cybercrime has become a serious issue as internet emerges in 21st century. Due to the fact that, countless number of people don’t know how to protect themselves on the internet, they have become an easy target for hackers. as they can easily break into your computer and cause major inconvenience. Ev...
  • 6band
    People use organic more and more frequently. What are the advantages and advantages of this type of food?
    As people express growing concern about building a healthy diet, dieticians are looking for an alternative source of nutrition, not from processed food, but organic ones. Though consuming organic food brings about sustainable and healthy development, the downsides of this trend should not be overloo...