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Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion

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The manufacture of electricity using a method called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC) displayed on the illustration. The whole process gets through many steps and uses many supporting sources until become consumable water. In the first stage, warm seawater revealed above 1000m of the sea transformed by the solar energy into water vapour, while cold seawater beneath 1000m flows circling condensing chamber. Afterwards, half water vapour infiltrated in evacuated evaporation chamber until it enhance saltless water vapour that generates electricity by turning the turbine, while other half of the water vapour condensed in chamber which creates pure water. Cold seawater that flows surround the chamber secluded into waste saltwater. Finally, pure water that condensed in the chamber become drinking water. Thereby, proceeding pure water is quite demanding since it consumed by all people. It prove to be, at most by water, we can invent electricity thus used for every needs.
The manufacture of electricity using a method called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (
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OTEC
) displayed on the illustration. The whole process
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steps and
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supporting sources until become consumable water.

In the
first
stage, warm seawater revealed above
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1000m
of the sea transformed by the solar energy into
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water
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vapour
, while
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cold
seawater beneath
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1000m
flows circling condensing
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chamber
. Afterwards, half
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water
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vapour
infiltrated in evacuated evaporation
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chamber
until it enhance
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saltless
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water
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vapour
that generates electricity by turning the turbine, while other half of the
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water
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vapour
condensed in
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chamber
which creates pure
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water
.
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Cold
seawater that flows surround the
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chamber
secluded into waste saltwater.
Finally
, pure
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water
that condensed in the
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chamber
become drinking water.

Thereby, proceeding pure
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water
is quite demanding since it consumed by all
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people
. It
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prove
to be, at most by
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water
, we can invent electricity
thus
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used
for every needs.
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IELTS essay Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
150 words
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