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Obviously, the prioritised duty of one company is making profit for their investor and owners. Having said that, they should only focus on the major purpose of profit. From my perspective, I think that they should pay more attention to their social obligations rather than following that irresponsible way.

Obviously, the prioritised duty of one company is making profit for their investor and owners. Having said that, they should only focus on the major purpose of profit. From my perspective, I think that they should pay more attention to their social obligations rather than following that irresponsible way. PR77p
Obviously, the prioritised duty of one company is making profit for their investor and owners. Having said that, they should only focus on the major purpose of profit. From my perspective, I think that they should pay more attention to their social obligations rather than following that irresponsible way. The most salient adverse side of following the sole aim of maximum profit without social obligations is that companies would be overshadowed and draw numerous criticisms from the community rather than advantages. Honestly, it taxes one company's labor resources and considerable budgets to finance social projects, yet this creates the myriad of opportunities for obtaining more attention from the community. Many reports confirm that these investments not only increase the level of brand recognition but also improve the annual financial performances. And whatmore, it is the valuable changes for attracting more potential customers and partners for long-term development. Having said that running businesses for maximum profit contributes to the variety of social issues, therefore businesspersons need to be responsible for their involvement. In other words, far too many problems, especially environmental ones, which are claimed to be caused mainly by business projects, have daily impacts on their customers as well as their employees. As a result, to survive further, ít is essential for companies to make more practical efforts to solve these issues instead of ignoring them sustainably. Also, even though it is optional, the employers should rather try to improve their worker's living standard rather than exploit them. That contributes to better the quality of work for the businesses. In conclusion, I believe that companies should not just concentrate on earning as much as they can. They need to account for the betterment of the community and their labor as well.
Obviously
, the
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prioritised
duty of one
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company
is making
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profit
for their investor and owners. Having said that, they should
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only
focus on the major purpose of
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profit
. From my perspective, I
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think
that they should pay more attention to their
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social
obligations
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rather
than following that irresponsible way. The most salient adverse side of following the sole aim of maximum
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profit
without
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social
obligations is that
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companies
would
be overshadowed
and draw numerous criticisms from the community
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rather
than advantages.
Honestly
, it taxes one
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company
's labor resources and considerable budgets to finance
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social
projects,
yet
this creates the myriad of opportunities for obtaining more attention from the community.
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Many
reports confirm that these investments not
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only
increase the level of brand recognition
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but
also
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improve
the annual financial performances. And
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whatmore
, it is the valuable
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changes
for attracting more potential customers and partners for long-term development. Having said that running businesses for maximum
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profit
contributes to the variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
issues,
therefore
businesspersons need to be responsible for their involvement.
In other words
, far too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
problems,
especially
environmental ones, which
are claimed
to
be caused
mainly
by business projects, have daily impacts on their customers
as well
as their employees.
As a result
, to survive
further
,
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ít
is essential for
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companies
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more practical efforts to solve these issues
instead
of ignoring them
sustainably
.
Also
,
even though
it is optional, the employers should
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rather
try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their worker's living standard
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rather
than exploit them. That contributes to better the quality of work for the businesses.
In conclusion
, I believe that
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companies
should not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
concentrate on earning as much as they can. They need to account for the betterment of the community and their labor
as well
.
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IELTS essay Obviously, the prioritised duty of one company is making profit for their investor and owners. Having said that, they should only focus on the major purpose of profit. From my perspective, I think that they should pay more attention to their social obligations rather than following that irresponsible way.

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1 paragraphs
291 words
5.5
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