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Observing the table, analyzing can be done and can be concluded that for Lunch, the weekdays happens to be the best sale period and the weekends prove to be the lowest, with the highest sale

Observing the table, analyzing can be done and can be concluded that for Lunch, the weekdays happens to be the best sale period and the weekends prove to be the lowest, with the highest sale 2x59x
There has been a drastic increase in the technology aspect. Due to this advancement, the computers have become a replacement for human resource at most work places which has become a bane for many individuals. Usage of a computer can make regular tasks easier but cannot be deployed in the areas where decision making should be done, which is a limitation for a computer. Due to the increase in usage of computer, the human life has become obsolete. The work involved repeated tasks and can be performed without any intelligence are now being performed by the computers. This resulted in loss of job for various people who used to perform these tasks. My uncle, who used to work as an Assistant Librarian, was a victim to this computer advent. He used to tell the availability of books and guide the people to the section where the book could be found. With the introduction of computer, he lost his job as the computer was able to perform the same duty. Although the routine tasks can be performed by computer, it was unable to replace him in the real time tasks like suggestion of best book among several books which deals with same the subject. In the modern time, all the customer care services have become computerized and are used in the case of dealing regular queries which rules out many jobs. But, eventually when there is a different query for the customer, the call gets directly connected to the customer care executive which dictates the operational boundary of computer. Same in the case of Banking sector, there is a computerized service to state the transaction details to the user but if there is any malpractice in the transaction, the concerned executive shall deal with the situation and this cannot be dealt by computer alone due to lack of intelligence. Although there is high development in the technology aspect, the computers can never replace the mastermind that has created it in the first place. The computers lack intelligence to deal with real time problems and also the issues related to social affairs and this can only be dealt by human workforce. In the future, I believe there will be emergence of new sector where the importance of human workforce comes into play and new challenging jobs can be generated.
There has been a drastic increase in the technology aspect. Due to this advancement, the computers have
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become
a replacement for
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human
resource at most work places which has
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become
a bane for
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many
individuals. Usage of a computer can
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make
regular
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tasks
easier
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but
cannot
be deployed
in the areas where
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decision making
should
be done
, which is a limitation for a computer.

Due to the increase in usage of computer, the
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human
life has
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become
obsolete. The work involved repeated
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tasks
and can
be performed
without any intelligence are
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now
being performed
by the computers. This resulted in loss of
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job
for various
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people
who
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used
to perform these
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tasks
. My uncle, who
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used
to work as an Assistant Librarian, was a victim to this computer advent. He
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used
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
the availability of
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books
and guide the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to the section where the
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book
could
be found
. With the introduction of computer, he lost his
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job
as the computer was able to perform the same duty. Although the routine
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tasks
can
be performed
by computer, it was unable to replace him in the real time
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tasks
like suggestion of best
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book
among several
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books
which deals with same the subject.

In the modern time, all the customer care services have
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become
computerized and are
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used
in the case of dealing regular queries which
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rules
out
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many
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jobs
.
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But
,
eventually
when there is a
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different
query for the customer, the call
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gets
directly
connected to the customer care executive which dictates the operational boundary of computer. Same in the case of Banking sector, there is a computerized service to state the transaction
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details
to the user
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
if there is any malpractice in the transaction, the concerned executive shall deal with the situation and this cannot
be dealt
by computer alone due to lack of intelligence.

Although there is high development in the technology aspect, the computers can never replace the mastermind that has created it in the
first
place. The computers lack intelligence to deal with real time problems and
also
the issues related to social affairs and this can
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only
be dealt
by
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human
workforce. In the future, I believe there will be emergence of new sector where the importance of
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human
workforce
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comes
into play and new challenging
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jobs
can
be generated
.
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IELTS essay Observing the table, analyzing can be done and can be concluded that for Lunch, the weekdays happens to be the best sale period and the weekends prove to be the lowest, with the highest sale

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4 paragraphs
387 words
6.0
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