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Obesity is an increasing public health problem in some parts of the world Explain some possible reasons for this problems and suggest some solutions. Give reasons fr your answer, and include any relevant examples fom your own knowledge or experience.

Obesity is an increasing public health problem in some parts of the world Explain some possible reasons for this problems and suggest some solutions. Give reasons fr your answer, and include any relevant examples fom your own knowledge or experience. pLr9L
Becoming overweight is one of the major problem for public health. Obese people are becoming more and more in some parts of globe which is a problematic thing for the public health. This essay will explain main reasons and some solutons by suggesting some tips and choices. Fast food has major role in gaining weight or having a paunch. It has just after 50 percent of proteins and carbohydrates inside of each potatoes, chickens and so on. Furthermore, fast food has popularized among all worker wheather they are working physically and mentally or even not working. In addition, the taste of food is also a main cause which attract customers to purchase. above all reasons we can say that the problem is shortage of time in break/life and taste for people. Even though there are reasons for this problems, a number of suggestions, for instance, selected diet and working to become a professional cooker, in order to solve the problems. keeping on diet is the key to control your weight gaining and remain healthy. And cooking in skillful way as skilled and professional cooker who have experience in cooking either easy and tasty food can get you to stay from fast food and other chemical-made food which are the rudimentary causes for putting on weight.
Becoming overweight is one of the major
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for public health. Obese
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people
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parts of globe which is a problematic thing for the public health. This essay will
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explain
main reasons and
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solutons
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some
tips and choices.

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Fast
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food
has major role in gaining weight or having a paunch. It has
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after 50 percent of proteins and carbohydrates
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potatoes
, chickens and
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on.
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fast
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food
has popularized among all worker
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wheather
they are working
physically
and mentally or even not working.
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, the taste of
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food
is
also
a main cause which attract customers to
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purchase
.
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all reasons we can say that the
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problem
is shortage of time in break/life and taste for
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people
.

Even though
there are reasons for
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problems
, a number of suggestions,
for instance
, selected diet and working to become a professional cooker, in order to solve the
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problems
.
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keeping
on diet is the key to control your weight gaining and remain healthy. And cooking in skillful way as skilled and professional cooker who have experience in cooking either easy and tasty
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food
can
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get
you to stay from
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fast
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food
and other chemical-made
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food
which are the rudimentary causes for putting on weight.
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IELTS essay Obesity is an increasing public health problem in some parts of the world Explain some possible reasons for this problems and suggest some solutions. Give reasons fr your answer, and include any relevant examples fom your own knowledge or experience.

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