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Number of people who are at high risk of serious health problem.reasons and solution.

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Obesity is increasing with a greater pace. The Number of people who are at|risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is incresing. You are capable to decrease the obesity. Which are outlined in below Various reason for growth in overweight people in society that fast food, lack of physical activities etc. Firstly, many peoples used to eat fast food and it is injurious for health. In this scenerio some people like to eat fast food, they increase ratio of obesity and other dangerous diseases. secondly, many peoples decreases physical activities in daily routine and insted of they are played indoor games that cause affect on health, increasingly obesity. Apart from this we will not do work properly due to fat and in future they are very harmful. There are some ways to decrease the overweight. This is only depend on you in which type of method used to decreases plump. In this time, lack in physical activities and to keep yourself fit to do numerous physical activities and should plays a outdoor games and must to avoid the fast foods like burgers, pizza, fried roll etc. In this scenario plump being a harmful disease and everyone want to prevent from obesity To conclude, i would like to reffer that to avoid the fast food and start do physical activities and some people says 'NO PAIN NO GAIN' similarly person do the hardwork and one day they were being success person.
Obesity is increasing with a greater pace. The Number of
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incresing
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decrease
the obesity. Which
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in below

Various reason for growth in overweight
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people
in society that
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fast
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food
, lack of
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physical
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activities
etc.
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,
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many
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peoples
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used
to eat
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fast
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food
and it is injurious for health. In this
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scenerio
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some
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people
like to eat
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fast
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food
, they increase ratio of obesity and other
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dangerous
diseases.
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secondly
,
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many
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peoples
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decreases
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physical
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activities
in daily routine and
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insted
of they
are played
indoor games that cause
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affect
on health,
increasingly
obesity. Apart from this we will not do work
properly
due to
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fat
and in future they are
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very
harmful.

There are
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some
ways to
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decrease
the overweight. This is
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only
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used
to
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decreases
plump. In this time, lack in
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physical
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activities
and to
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keep
yourself fit to do numerous
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physical
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activities
and should
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plays
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outdoor games and
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must to
avoid the
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fast
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foods
like burgers, pizza, fried roll etc. In this scenario plump being a harmful disease and everyone
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want
to
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prevent
from
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obesity


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,
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reffer
that to avoid the
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fast
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food
and
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start
do
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physical
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activities
and
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some
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people
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says
'NO PAIN NO GAIN'
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and one day they were being success person.
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IELTS essay Number of people who are at high risk of serious health problem. reasons and solution.

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