Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Nowadays travelling to foreign country for pleasure is popular ,some believe that it has a negative impact on country

Nowadays travelling to foreign country for pleasure is popular, some believe that it has a negative impact on country bb3MQ
Travelling across the globe and experiencing an entire new world is a dream for many people and hodophiles. Many travel to countries for enjoyment and thrill, however, some consider that travelling has negative effects on the nation. This essay will discuss both views considering travelling. Firstly, Tourists plays a crucial role in the country’s economy, from many corners of the world visitors visit to a particular country for holidays and vacations. which involves more currency exchanges, and helps the local market and small business to earn profit through Tourism and eventually boosting the country’s economy. For example, many northern states in India depend on the tourists for daily income. Secondly, tourists experience the vast diverse culture and traditions, this influences them and spreading the cultures and style in their native country. Nowadays we observe many people adapting western culture. Lastly, tourism opens a new industry and more job opportunities which bolster the country’s economy. There are some negative impacts on countries where large number of tourists are accumulated on a daily basis. This leads many tourist attractions and natural wonders at risk of pollution. Visitors laxity can cause many new problems and it becomes difficult to maintain the particular site or attraction. In Goa tourists visit in huge numbers to enjoy the beach, this overcrowded beach results in more junk and water pollution. Regardless of this negative effects, with strict government regulations and establishing new rules by Ministry of Tourism this impact can be under control. To conclude, I disagree with the statement which highlights the negative impact as we tourists must travel responsibly without damaging the site. However travelling has more benefits toward the nation and for us.
Travelling across the globe and experiencing an entire
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
world is a dream for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and
Possible spelling mistake found.
hodophiles
.
Possible agreement error. The noun travel seems to be uncountable; consider using: "much travel", "a good deal of travel".
Many travel
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
for enjoyment and thrill,
however
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
consider that travelling has
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
effects on the nation. This essay will discuss both views considering travelling.

Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Tourists
plays a crucial role in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country’s
economy, from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
corners of the world visitors visit to a particular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
for holidays and vacations.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
which
involves more currency exchanges, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
the local market and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
business to earn profit through Tourism and
eventually
boosting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country’s
economy.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
northern states in India depend on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
for daily income.
Secondly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
experience the vast diverse culture and traditions, this influences them and spreading the cultures and style in their native
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. Nowadays we observe
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
adapting western culture.
Lastly
, tourism opens a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
industry and more job opportunities which bolster the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country’s
economy.

There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
impacts on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
where large number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
are accumulated
on a daily basis. This leads
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourist
attractions and natural wonders at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risk
of pollution. Visitors laxity can cause
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
problems and it becomes difficult to maintain the particular site or attraction. In Goa
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
visit in huge numbers to enjoy the beach, this overcrowded beach results in more junk and water pollution. Regardless of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
effects, with strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
regulations and establishing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
by Ministry of Tourism this impact can be under control.

To conclude
, I disagree with the statement which highlights the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
negative
impact as we
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourists
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
travel
responsibly
without damaging the site.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
travelling has more benefits toward the nation and for us.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Nowadays travelling to foreign country for pleasure is popular, some believe that it has a negative impact on country

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts