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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. gmb3
There is an on-going trend that shows that the media and news channels concentrating only on the negative aspects of things rather than the better side. However, some people argue that this concentration on negative side is harmful to the local society and its people and this essay agrees with them. Firstly, focusing on the negative side of things will significantly affect the overall mental and phsycological state of the society. As a result of being permenantly exposed to only negative global news, the happiness hormones in an individual's blood will drasticlly decrease, which will subsequently lead to weaker phsycological health. For example, the Egyptian Ministry of Health recently published a groundbreaking study stating that if a person watches a lot of negative news during the day, their happiness will definitly decrease. In addition to that, it is predicted that 80% of the world's countries would have issued laws to reduce negative news by the year 2050, according to the World Health Organization. Moreover, it may also lead to lesser economic productivity due to the decreased motivation levels a person has. Seeing only the negative aspect of things will weaken the mental strength because of the increased feeling of hopelessness. For instance, in the period between 2010 and 2015, the Egyptian people's productivity decreased by 50% compared to the period between 2000 and 2005 as result of the consistent expousre to negative news. However, this decrease forced the local government to invest in entertainment facilities to improve the mental health of the society and subsequently the economic output. All in all, media and news chanels should show a better side of the world because being permenantly exposed to only the negative aspect will lead to lower happiness levels and lesser economic productivity.
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trend that
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shows
that the media and
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news
channels concentrating
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only
on the
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negative
aspects of things
rather
than the better side.
However
,
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some
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people
argue that this concentration on
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negative
side is harmful to the local society and its
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people
and this essay
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agrees
with them.

Firstly
, focusing on the
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negative
side of things will
significantly
affect the
overall
mental and
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phsycological
state of the society.
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of being
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permenantly
exposed to
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only
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negative
global
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news
, the happiness hormones in an individual's blood will
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drasticlly
decrease, which will
subsequently
lead to weaker
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phsycological
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health
.
For example
, the Egyptian Ministry of
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Health
recently published a groundbreaking study stating that if a person
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watches
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a lot of
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negative
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news
during the day, their happiness will
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definitly
decrease.
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to that, it
is predicted
that 80% of the world's countries would have issued laws to
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reduce
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negative
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news
by the year 2050, according to the World
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Health
Organization.

Moreover
, it may
also
lead to lesser economic productivity due to the decreased motivation levels a person has. Seeing
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only
the
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negative
aspect of things will weaken the mental strength
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because
of the increased feeling of hopelessness.
For instance
, in the period between 2010 and 2015, the Egyptian
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people
's productivity decreased by 50% compared to the period between 2000 and 2005 as result of the consistent
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expousre
to
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negative
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news
.
However
, this decrease forced the local
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government
to invest in entertainment facilities to
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improve
the mental
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health
of the society and
subsequently
the economic output.

All in all, media and
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news
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chanels
should
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show
a better side of the world
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because
being
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permenantly
exposed to
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only
the
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negative
aspect will lead to lower happiness levels and lesser economic productivity.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society.

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