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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changedbecause of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types ofrelationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negativedevelopment? v.2

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changedbecause of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types ofrelationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negativedevelopment? v. 2
In the world nowadays, the behavior of people with their partners has altered since the light of the proliferation of technology. there are a variety of ways that personal relationships have been influenced by the use of technical devices and I believe that the benefits of this change outweigh the drawbacks. The two main effects on friendships which can be obviously seen are not only how people show their emotions but also the ways that they contact each other. Firstly, by reading the statuses written on social networks, teenagers can update the situation of their friends every day. Lots of people are choosing to talk to their partners by the assistance of video calls in lieu of going to restaurants or café to save time and money. Secondly, should a person install some social networks such as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and apps like that, he can illustrate his feeling which may be unreal on the statuses and pictures of his friends. this is the reason why close relationships have declined, by contrast, losing touch with distant friends is not necessarily an unfavorable issue. The adjustment of the way that people interact is beneficial based on two key reasons. First, the use of handheld devices increasing significantly in recent years assists the users in getting in touch more easily and faster with their companions than in approximately three decades ago. For example, while it took about at least one week to deliver the letters of a temper in the past, current residents can receive immediately the vital messages in a few seconds. Furthermore, the social relations of every individual are expanding day by day. residents nowadays establish easily a relationship with a foreigner who is living in another country. In conclusion, there are some changes in relationships towards eschewing traditional communication methods like letters in favor of modern gadgets and I am firm in my belief that this improvement is convenient for people in some aspects.
In the world nowadays, the behavior of
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with their partners has altered since the light of the proliferation of technology.
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there
are a variety of ways that personal
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relationships
have
been influenced
by the
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use
of technical devices and I believe that the benefits of this
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change
outweigh the drawbacks. The two main effects on friendships which can be
obviously
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seen
are not
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only
how
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people
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show
their emotions
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but
also
the ways that they contact each other.
Firstly
, by reading the statuses written on social networks,
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teenagers
can update the situation of their friends every day. Lots of
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people
are choosing to talk to their partners by the assistance of video calls in lieu of going to restaurants or café to save time and money.
Secondly
, should a person install
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some
social networks such as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter and apps like that, he can illustrate his feeling which may be unreal on the statuses and pictures of his friends.
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this
is the reason why close
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relationships
have declined, by contrast, losing touch with distant friends is not
necessarily
an unfavorable issue. The adjustment of the way that
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people
interact is beneficial based on two key reasons.
First
, the
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use
of handheld devices increasing
significantly
in recent years assists the users in getting in touch more
easily
and faster with their companions than in approximately three decades ago.
For example
, while it took about at least one week to deliver the letters of a temper in the past,
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current
residents can receive immediately the vital messages in a few seconds.
Furthermore
, the social relations of every individual are expanding day by day.
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residents
nowadays establish
easily
a
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relationship
with a foreigner who is living in another country.
In conclusion
, there are
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some
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changes
in
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relationships
towards eschewing traditional communication methods like letters in favor of modern
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gadgets and
I am firm in my belief that this improvement is convenient for
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people
in
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some
aspects.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changedbecause of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types ofrelationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negativedevelopment? v. 2

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
325 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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