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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development? Gxjg
These days, the relationship people have with each other has been affected by advancements in technology. There are several ways in which our relationships have been affected and I believe that this has been negative. Relationships have changed in the following ways. One of the major ways is that nowadays people have more acquaintances and fewer close friends. For example, many people may have hundreds and thousands of friends on social media websites like Facebook as it is easy to connect through these websites. However, most of these people are not really close friends at all. In addition, technology has led to less face-to-face interaction between people. Because using social media sites has become an integral part of the lives of many people these days and connecting with others has become so much easier as a result of such sites, most people spend more time online chatting with their friends than actually meeting them face-to-face. I believe that the above changes have been negative for the following reasons. In the first place, people now feel lonelier as they spend more time with the computer rather than with other human beings. Studies have shown that people need real face-to-face interaction if they want to remain emotionally healthy. Therefore, the lack of such communication has made many people become lonely and even depressed. Furthermore, many people who use technology to communicate with others are gradually losing important social skills. It is very common for people nowadays to know how to communicate and express themselves using emoticons or other forms of expression that are common online. However, an unfortunate consequence of all this is that people do not know how to express themselves properly using their body language or tone of expression. In conclusion, because of technology, people have fewer close friends and have less direct contact with people. This development is negative as it is easier for people to feel lonely because of this and they are becoming less adept in social situations. Given this situation, it is recommended that people should seek to spend less time on electronic devices in order to improve their relationships with others.
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friends
.
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may have hundreds and thousands of
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on
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media websites like Facebook as it is easy to connect through these websites.
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are not
really
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friends
at all.
In addition
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has led to
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using
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media sites has become an integral part of the
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these days and connecting with others has become
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much easier
as a result
of such sites, most
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spend more time online chatting with their
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than actually meeting them face-to-face.

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for the following reasons. In the
first
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feel lonelier as they spend more time with the computer
rather
than with
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other
human beings. Studies have shown that
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people
need real face-to-face interaction if they want to remain
emotionally
healthy.
Therefore
, the lack of such communication has made
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many
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people
become lonely and even depressed.
Furthermore
,
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who
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use
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technology
to communicate with others are
gradually
losing
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important
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common for
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nowadays to know how to communicate and express themselves using emoticons or
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other
forms of expression that are common online.
However
, an unfortunate consequence of all this is that
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people
do not know how to express themselves
properly
using their body language or tone of expression.

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have fewer close
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and have
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less
direct contact with
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people
. This development is
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negative
as it is easier for
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people
to feel lonely
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this and
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adept in
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situations.
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this situation, it
is recommended
that
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people
should seek to spend
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less
time on electronic devices in order to
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improve
their relationships with others.
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IELTS essay Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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4 paragraphs
356 words
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